Undesireable: Chapter 8

Nov 19, 2008 10:17

TITLE: Undesirable (A vampire novel)
RATING: NC-17 (This chapter PG-13)
GENRE: Porn with plot -- heavy on the plot. Action/adventure, some black humor, some romance.
PAIRINGS: George x everyone. Mostly Slash, some het, three and moresomes. Vampire sex.
WARNINGS: (this chapter) none.
WORD COUNT: 5318

Chapter 8 )

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drelfina November 19 2008, 18:51:12 UTC
(Random correction: Stan sticks his feet into the aisle, not isle)

But gods woman, you've got my heart in my throat the entire time. All throughout the entire piece I kept thinking, George, you've had it now...

But then vampire magic can't work over the phone, just like tone and everything is lost through electronic media and gods I was so honestly glad for George.

And then there's random tidbits of information and George got away from the airport and...

Fuck Stan. Stan knows something. Is it because he's just an arrogant smug son of a bitch and George is jumpy (and therefore we have to be since it's his POV) or is it because Stan knows?

I'm biting my lip the entire time, my heart pounding with each paragraph, and you ended it with a cliffhanger, damn!

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velvet_mace November 20 2008, 00:02:57 UTC
Got it! Thanks!

I'm really glad that the tension keeps up. It's my goal to keep everyone on edge for the next chapter until I finish this.

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drelfina November 20 2008, 00:37:37 UTC
It's fabulous. I think if I tried reading the entire thing at once I might die of a heartattack.

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arkanefyre November 19 2008, 19:32:54 UTC
Oh, shit. Geooorrggeeeee!

This is awesome. I sort of like Lord Jeffrey. Don't know why. Anyhow, brilliant, as always! Can't wait for the next chapter.

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velvet_mace November 20 2008, 00:05:04 UTC
I hope you like Lord Jeffrey -- I like Lord Jeffrey, even though he can be an asshole at times. Hopefully I'll give you reason to like him more in the coming chapters.

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tashasaphi November 19 2008, 19:49:24 UTC
*twitching a spazzing for George*

I so want him to get away-- poor little mite! I know it's not going to happen, and I'm surprised at myself for wanting it, but what an awful situation he's in!

I die til there is more!

*stabs a Stan voodoo plushie*

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velvet_mace November 20 2008, 00:08:53 UTC
Yeah, George's situation really sucks -- a whole lot more than he realizes.

I'm glad you want him to get away, because if you didn't he wouldn't be that sympathetic. But of course, it's no fun if he gets away, because punishing George is way too much fun.

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orion117 November 20 2008, 11:11:05 UTC
Stan's take on vampire life is interesting. I'm guessing that if there is already a bounty out on George's head, Stan wants a piece of it. I didn't think George would stay on the run this long, but he surprised me.

I wonder what Lord Jeffrey's orientation was supposed to have been like? It seems that George was almost persuaded by him, even without the influence of his mind control.

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velvet_mace November 20 2008, 16:04:12 UTC
Jeffrey is mostly gay, but not completely. Perhaps tipped 80 percent towards the gay side, but he wouldn't turn down a hot chick with tasty numbers.

From Stan's POV life isn't bad. Of course, he's not even part-time harem, he's just one of the grounds keepers.

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orion117 November 20 2008, 18:15:45 UTC
XD I meant the orientation program Lord Jeffrey said that George missed out on, owing to the negligence of his people. It probably looked more like indoctrination from George's point-of-view.

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velvet_mace November 20 2008, 18:29:17 UTC
Oh... well for what one of those looks like...

Actually, it would have probably been a "Hi, welcome to the cult club, here are the perks, here are the duties, here's where you live, here's a shoulder to cry on for a while." Would it have worked? Knowing George, probably not. George's parents could have told Jeffrey that he's got a pretty tough stubborn streak. They could have also told him that George was almost 4 before he finally potty trained.

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militsa November 22 2008, 02:05:03 UTC

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