Undesirable: Chapter 5

[velvet_mace]

TITLE: Undesirable (A vampire novel)
RATING: NC-17 (This chapter NC-17)
GENRE: Porn with plot -- heavy on the plot. Action/adventure, some black humor, some romance.
PAIRINGS: George x everyone. Mostly Slash, some het, three and moresomes. Vampire sex.
WARNINGS: (this chapter) Non-con.
WORD COUNT: 4082

Comments

[arkanefyre]

Oh man, no wonder Willy didn't want anybody to know what happens during Service. I thought PETS was intense. This takes mindfuckery and non-con to a whole new level.

And I love it. XD Can't wait for more!

(is it complete, and you're posting as you edit, or are you writing this as you post?)

[velvet_mace]

No way is this complete. This is just the beginning. This is setting up the problem as it were: the rest of the novel is solving the problem. So now we know what the stakes are.

I'm currently writing chapter 10, but since I am going back and revising things as I go on, I'm leaving a 4 chapter padding -- which turns out I need. While writing chapter 9 I realized there was a small but key change that had to be made back in chapter 6, and a major one in chapter 8. By the time I'm done with 10, I don't see any reason while I'll have to mess with chapter 6 again, so I'll post it.

[tashasaphi]

*dies til there is more*

I haven't been this excited about unpublished fiction since my degree workshopping. I'm serious. Keep at it!

[velvet_mace]

Awww! Thanks. That really makes my day.

[yaoigoddess18]

Its freakish that I found this story at AFF- I haven't looked at the original fiction there in at least a year and peeked in just in time to see this at the top of the list and take a peek. I'M SO GLAD I DID, since its turned out to be one of those "diamonds in the rough" that are so hard to find. <3 Thank you for the read, I'm looking forward to seeing how this turns out!

[velvet_mace]

I've been reading he original fiction section there for about 2 years. There's some really good stuff, and a lot of really bad stuff, and a couple that look bad on the surface, but if you give them half a chance, they are gold.

[yaoigoddess18]

Mm, I used to frequent it a lot, until AFF switched hands and stuff was lost- a lot of the authors I was watching disappeared. I just never got around to rummaging through again until recently.

[charisstoma]

How did I miss this and only find it at chapter 5? This is a sequel? Where does one find the previous, PETS, is it?
I thought I knew to watch for postings by you since your other fiction has been enjoyable. *shakes head at self*

[velvet_mace]

Well the answer to how you missed it is because I only started posting it yesterday. I'm catching up to what I've been posting in AFF.Net. Now AFF.Net and my LJ are the same.

It's not a sequel to anything. This is an original fic not a fanfic. My characters. My background, mine mine mine.

PETS was a much darker thing I wrote for the FMA fandom.

[militsa]

[velvet_mace]

It's a WIP. I'm estimating it will be about 25-30 chapters when finished. I'm currently working on chapter 10.

I'm glad about the narrators voice. I was trying to make him interesting, because I think this story only works if the protagonist is someone we can kind of like -- and yet also enjoy seeing be kicked around a bit.

The tone is a tough call for me. I could make this really really dark, ala PETS, but honestly, I don't think a lot of people want to read that kind of rapefic porn. It's a bit too... guro-esque. So this is very fantasy rapeish -- all the drama of rape without any of that nasty soul distroying realistic after effects. I'm going for a guilty pleasure rather than full on sadism.

I'm hoping that it works. It's a bit tough to justify rapefic, even though that's my main kink. It's so many other people's squick, and without fandom to garner me readers, I gotta be careful not to drive too many people away.

[militsa]