Comments | velvet_mace: PETS Chapter 2

velvet_mace

PETS Chapter 2

Jul 10, 2005 23:24

Since I finished the next chapter of Pawns, I feel less guilty about writing this as well. It really WAS eating my brains out ( Read more... )

fma: greed, fma: al, fma, roy, fma: ed, fic, rated: nc-17, pets

Comments 53

mikkeneko July 11 2005, 07:20:10 UTC

Oopsie.

velvet_mace July 11 2005, 07:26:56 UTC

Did I write something wrong, or is that a comment about Roy.

mikkeneko July 11 2005, 08:40:10 UTC

Comment re Roy.

mikkeneko July 11 2005, 07:24:56 UTC

Hopefully, Roy will play it cool and smart -- acquiese to Greed and keep as much freedom as possible. Send a letter of his own, warning the military of what to expect. The military will sit up and take notice if an officer and alchemist vanishes while on investigation, oh yes.

velvet_mace July 11 2005, 07:30:51 UTC

We'll see. First we gotta get through all the sex.

The question is who figures it out something isn't kosher first, the Military or Greed.

thisisnotmyname July 11 2005, 07:27:41 UTC

ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!

velvet_mace July 11 2005, 07:31:26 UTC

uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuhhh?

Not sure incoherentness is good or bad.

thisisnotmyname July 11 2005, 07:32:21 UTC

dude are you kidding?

its good!

sky_dark July 11 2005, 07:29:17 UTC

hominahominahomina! 0_0 What you do to me!

velvet_mace July 11 2005, 07:34:30 UTC

I hope you like. As I said before if the concept is flawed it's still quite changeable.

sky_dark July 11 2005, 07:38:45 UTC

*pulls self together enough for a coherent response*

I love it. It's a bold concept and it's working nicely so far. This Ed seems far more mature than his canon counterpart. His cynacism at such a young age is heart-breaking. His lack of confidence is Roy, and yet feeling unable to simply abandon the man to fate is touching. Despite everything he's suffering through, he instinctively seeks to 'protect' for lack of a better word this man he just met. It still speaks of canon Ed's compassion and kindness, so it makes him IC in an AU. It's brilliant stuff Velvet, simply masterful.

velvet_mace July 11 2005, 08:16:39 UTC

Aw... Thanks. Swelled head.

Ok, I think I did good. Wasn't sure at first, thought I might be overdoing it with making Greed lust for Roy on top of everyone else, but hey, Roy is so yummy, how could Greed resist.

OMFG xpyne July 11 2005, 07:39:11 UTC

oh my freaking god!! this fic is so awesome. that last line was so perfect!!! "He keeps them." Ah!! it's like a movie line. i love it. im so hyped up now on the promise of pawns and of getting pets and of the promise of nc-17 pets. im really looking forward to seeing a nc-17 fic by you with a plot. i hate drabbles. they give just enough to get interested, but there's never any more, never any development of anything, be it plot, characters, or relationships. they're just glimpses of scenes that dont exist. one shots are almost as bad! they give you the whole scene, and if you're lucky a mini-plot, but they just aren't as satisfying as a good, long fuck story. haha, but enough of my anti-drabble rant; what i mean is that im so excited by the prospect of you writing a big long plotful story with Nc-17 dirty bits included ( ... )

Re: OMFG sky_dark July 11 2005, 07:47:31 UTC

hey there, saw your pics! To friends some one just click on their name (i.e. velvet_mace and click on the + button on their user info page! I'm gonna friend you! =D

Re: OMFG velvet_mace July 11 2005, 08:06:48 UTC

Of course you can... if you can figure it out. LOL. Man, it's embarassing to admit how long it took me to figure out where that little man with the plus sign was hiding...