Fears [Oneshot]

[velvet_liquor]

Title: Fears
Author: velvet_liquor
Beta: musicalmimicry
Pairing: Aki (SID) x Kenzo (AYABIE)
Genre: Angst (kind of)
Rating: PG
Summary: “Are you happy?”

Comments

[invisiblehabits]

Oh wow, I really like this! It's so...real, somehow. The fact Aki was happy but is no more, yet he cannot put his finger on why. The idea love may have simply...slipped away, somehow, without them noticing. Or at least it did for Aki. It's sad, so very very sad, but it's something that sometimes happen. For real. Things change and we don't really know why...

Another thing I really, really like is that you left it where you did. Aki acknowledges the fact that no, he's not happy. And that's it. You don't tell us whether or not they break up and go their separate ways, or whether they fight through it, figure out what is wrong and mend it. Because there is that possibility too. Aki doesn't quite know why he's not happy, and neither do we. Until he figures that out, we'll never know whether or not they remained together or not. I like that, cause it allows me to dream up different scenarious in my head.

Indeed a very good story hun, with perfect English! You should be proud of yourself and write many, many more stories such as this. I want to read them all! <3

[velvet_liquor]

I do love your comment~ ♥

And this story just wrote itself, probably because it's based upon my own feelings~ and I think writing might just become a true escape for me. I think I have a lot of things to write down, and those two aren't even close to the end :P

As for the 'what happens next', who knows... I don't think neither of them do. Let's hope they'll find a solution~

Thank you so much again for this comment, and for reading, and yes, I will write more. I feel like writing~ =] ♥

[invisiblehabits]

I had a feeling, unfortunately, this was based on your own emotions. Such stories, when we write from within, are usually either excruciatingly hard or very very easy to write. They also tend to come out very good, when they do slip down on paper. But yeah, not happy you're feeling this way hun. *hugs*