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Supernatural: Breathe On, Sister

Apr 21, 2007 13:59

Title: Breathe On, Sister
By: Vehemently
Fandom: Supernatural
Wordcount: 2967
Rating: PG for swear words and scariness
Spoilers: none.
What is it: An action scene. A mission statement. A sudden opportunity. Just something you do.
Tagline: "-- up into the sky, and all I see is horror raining down --"

( Breathe On, Sister )

Comments 118

whew erinrua April 21 2007, 18:27:41 UTC

Okay, now this grabbed me by the collar and yanked me right out of my seat. Wow. From the brooding stew of failure and unhappiness and late-night radio chatter (Art Bell! Whoot!) to BANG, wegottasavelivesanddoitrightfreakingnow - what a rush! This was excellent, the pacing, the stark brevity of the boys' conversations, the action and moments ... Yeah. This goes to memories. Thanks for this. :-)
Cheers ~

Erin

Re: whew vee_fic April 22 2007, 04:17:33 UTC

Thanks very much. I wrote it in flow -- meaning, I had a general idea of what would happen but not a specific one till each step led to the next -- and I'm surprised and pleased at how it came out. Glad you enjoyed it so!

holli April 21 2007, 18:37:00 UTC

Oh, this is great! And, yeah, like Agent Henriksen's not confused enough *already*.

vee_fic April 22 2007, 04:18:43 UTC

Heh. Thanks. Poor Agent Gotcha has got his work cut out for him.

musesfool April 21 2007, 18:47:05 UTC

Vivid and evocative. And yeah, I'd like to see Henriksen figure this one out.

Now I am trying to figure out where on the LIE they were...

vee_fic April 22 2007, 04:23:10 UTC

They were at Magical Exit Q off the LIE. I mashed together stuff I've seen off the Cross-Bronx Expressway with my general impression of outer Queens for their stopoff. (All I know about the LIE is that it is straight and flat, two very weird things on a highway in the northeast.)

Glad you liked the story!

milesfromwhere April 28 2007, 01:19:46 UTC

Actually, the LIE isn't very straight, especially when you hit the outer reaches like exit 46 and beyond. Flat I'll definitely give you :D But as I liked the fic, I'm not going to start nitpicking for no reason. GREAT JOB!

vee_fic April 28 2007, 15:32:51 UTC

Thanks! I take my knowledge of the L.I.E. from years of watching New York news (I actually lived in Connecticut) and wow if people can't completely wreck their cars on the straightaway. I don't even want to know what they do on the curves.

Glad it worked so well for you (despite my shameless geographical fudging)!

quellefromage April 21 2007, 18:51:04 UTC

Absolutely riveting...and yeah, a shout out to Art Bell from me too. You rock. This was a pure adrenaline read...just kept gobbling up big chunks then had to go back and read again because it's so good. Off to rec...thanks for this.

vee_fic April 22 2007, 04:24:53 UTC

Thanks for the feedback, and the rec! Fame is always awesome. I love Art Bell's crowd, or rather, I am glad that they exist. (They're actually kind of boring and annoying to listen to.) The array of crackpottery on display in our nation's heartland --!

And then some of it might not be crackpotted at all.

arliss April 21 2007, 19:06:45 UTC

You have wire straight into my brain, yes? You push image, sound, and smell through wire into brain receptors, no need to bother with this "reading" thing.

I don't remember reading this. I remember being there.

vee_fic April 22 2007, 04:29:06 UTC

I think it is a side-effect of the group brain of the b.org. I am glad it worked the way it was supposed to in this instance!

Thanks.