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It might help to tone it down a tad to when it would really add something to the comment?
Just a suggestion o/
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Thanks for pointing it out to me, Ru! :^D
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I was just... starting to lose what he was saying. But maybe that was my fault lol.
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- 1. She comes across as very one-dimensional right now, as if she is all about the flirting. This is looking like a one-trick pony, and her username does not reduce that worry, neither did your first posting. I hope you are going to make her about more than that.
- 2. I hope this character makes you calm down a bit about the love life of other characters.
If we put these things aside, I think you can do well with this character, if you develop her a bit more and lay low on pasting her all over tropertales until we all got a chance to know her better. This will take time, but she has potential for a good addition to the roster.Reply
Now, this paragraph is me honestly being defensive and I'm getting it out of the way first: her username is for lulz and not meant to be taken seriously. I rarely put any thought into my usernames other than what strikes me at the time I'm creating the journal. That's it. Moving on to the proper reply to crit.
I don't plan on her being all about the flirting for much longer. The "proper" intro was more for lulz than anything else and the post during the event was because I felt the muns needed a break from the IC drama. Right now my plan is to have her focus more on the things she wants to do instead of just flirting with the boys. Things like see a movie in a theater or ride a rollercoaster or fight an orc. Try to grow her out of being as selfish and egocentric as she is. I will develop her more as time goes on, but it will take some time like it does for ( ... )
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I did not intend to attack you. I think you can progress the character well.
You said that you were going to have her do more, and that is enough for me. I look forward to see more of her.
I didn't realize anyone would mind about it.
I only found one line strange, but someone else deleted it. It was, by far, the least useful thing I said to you. Do not worry about it.
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Thank you again for the crit. I really do appreciate it and will work on things with her. If you ever see anything else that seems off with her or any of my other characters please feel free to let me know ASAP!
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