FIC: In a Mirror, Darkly: Chapter 21/?

[valeriev84]

Title: In a Mirror, Darkly: Chapter 21
Author: Valerie Vancollie (valeriev84 [at] hotmail.com)
Characters: Don, Charlie, Alan, David, Colby, Nikki, (surprise)
Rating: 15
Summary: There was a certain irony to the situation, that the brother who was a federal agent had been abducted to be used as leverage against the brother who was an applied

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[valeriev84]

So, Keane has realized that this is very much a case of the consequences being more than enough punishment for Don to not add anything more to it. Furious as he is with Don, he can't help but admire that he figured out the plan and managed to turn Banner against him.

What Keane hasn't really thought about is that he's pushed Don so much that Don has reached a point where it makes more sense to resist than not to. As one of my betas put it, if he struggles and dies, it means no more torture, and if he struggles and escapes, he's free. So a win-win for him as opposed to what Keane has planned.

Did you catch the little tie in back to the earlier Charlie chapter with Frazer leaving the blood on the knife when he sheaths it? It's the opposite of when I had Frazer tell Charlie that Banner was 'hung up' and couldn't make it. Only now you know the why at the time of the clue.

Oh, for anyone who is saving this fic as you go, I made a slight but important change to the last chapter. From the reviews, no one seemed to catch the error, but I found one that I couldn't let stand. Basically, I realized I'd forgotten something just before posting the chapter and added it in... not realizing that it would cause a tiny inconsistency with something a bit further on. In essence I had Don putting on the shirt while still handcuffed. I just added in a few words where Banner undoes the cuffs first. Sorry about that.

The next few chapters may be posted at a different time of day from normal as I'm going to visit my parents in the States. As of yet I'm not sure if it'll go up sooner in the day (no work!) or later (time difference!). Sorry if it inconveniences anyone.

As I've said before, we're rapidly reaching the end of this fic. Just 6 more chapters (it grew on me again!) unless something changes, one way or the other.

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[valeriev84]

Oh, I forgot to mention, but if you look, the last scene took place on Thursday, the day where everything comes to a head. It is the day the last part left off on. The final scene is actually the start of a scene that will span 4 chapters.