Comments | valeriev84: FIC: Into the Fire

valeriev84

FIC: Into the Fire

Jun 20, 2007 21:33

Title: Into the Fire
Author: Valerie Vancollie (valeriev84 [at] hotmail.com)
Characters: Don, Alan
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: None
Note: This was written for the numb3rs100 word prompt burn but it is not a part of my Crimin4l Numb3rs series. It is a one-shot drabble.
Disclaimer: I do not own any of the Numb3rs characters, items or situations. I only lay claim ( Read more... )

alan, don, canon, fan fiction

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valeriev84 June 20 2007, 22:53:21 UTC

In a good way? In a bad way? (Be brutally honest please!)

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emmademarais June 21 2007, 03:31:41 UTC

They link?

I had to read them twice since I was confused the first time around thinking they should be connected.

Reading them the second time as three totally separate drabbles with the same prompt worked fine, though it would have been easier if they each had a title.

Hey, it's honest!

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narcasse June 21 2007, 19:26:18 UTC

Well, I was confused too. I thought that these three parts were connected, or three drabbles that not conflicted with one another.
However, I can link the first and second parts, or link the second and third parts by different explanations, but cannot connect three parts together. In my opinion, there is some contradiction between the first and third parts because of Don's condition.

valeriev84 June 21 2007, 21:35:26 UTC

First off, thanks for commenting!

As for the connections, I can explain what I was thinking. Whether or not you can see it may be a different matter, unfortunately.

Basically I had in mind that the SUV was destroyed as a distraction for the kidnapping, so that the person could get away with taking Don while everyone was distracted and so that his absence wouldn't be immediately noticed. The second is part of the torture, Don's neck hurts from where he was hit when he was taken, his arms as he's strung up (hence the 'hang there' comment) and his blood from drugs. The third part was after his rescue and while he recuperates in the hospital.

Does any of that come through at all? I guess this is really one of those cases where the author knows too well what is going on that they don't see that it just isn't as clear for the reader! Sorry.

narcasse June 23 2007, 07:09:52 UTC

Thanks for your explanation. It is very reasonable.
My interpretation for second and third parts were right, but wrong for first and second parts. Blame myself for reading too many Don-whumping stories :p

valeriev84 June 23 2007, 12:19:11 UTC

No, there should be no blaming for reading Don-whumping fics. It should be praised and looked up to!

:)

jelsemium June 21 2007, 19:54:39 UTC

I'm as confused as the other posters. My first thought was that the first and second drabbles meant that Don had been kidnapped and his SUV blown up to cover that.

Then I thought that maybe the SUV had been blown up and the second drabble was just a fever-nightmare version of Don being taken to the hospital.

My third thought was that the first AND second drabbles were just fever nightmares and neither actually happened.

It was confusing. Then I realized that I have spent most of my lunch break thinking about your drabbles. So apparently I fell victim to your fiendish plot.

Whatever it was. ;-)

valeriev84 June 21 2007, 21:41:30 UTC

Sorry!

I didn't mean to be so confusing (or to eat up your time like that).

You were correct about the first two parts. The SUV was destroyed to cover the kidnapping. The only thing that didn't come across clear enough was that the third part was Don recovering after being rescued.

So: kidnap cover, torture and recovery.

Thanks for commenting, now I know to pay more attention in the future and step back to make sure my own ideas aren't coloring what I've actually written!

jelsemium June 28 2007, 02:42:15 UTC

You misunderstand, spending a large chunk of my lunch mulling over your drabbles was a *good thing* I like puzzles, I had a good time with your drabbles. :D

I think if you add one more drabble with the rescue, then your intentions would be made clearer.

Besides, more drabbles from you are welcome.

valeriev84 June 28 2007, 19:03:40 UTC

Ah! Oops. Well, you just made my day, I really needed something good (I've been cleaning for the past few hours)!

Yes, a rescue drabble would probably have been a good idea, I see that now. Though I'm not sure how I would have worked it in given the 300 word limit. Maybe I'll go back eventually and do a second set of drabbles to compliment this set. Though probably not in the near future as I'm already overwhelmed with ideas.

Thanks!