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[valentinaxsmash]

it's industrial. it's manic.
you huff my sweat like butane--
the musk of my skinny brown legs,
dirty glue and tar flowers.

my decency unzipped
i am linear, tan and dusty;
piled into a woman-stack,
leafed through like a book.

we hiss with the pages
mad and marked;
the pulp of princesses
mashed into madams.

ask me and i am hijacked.
debased, the words organic--
reciting them like a cult of one,
you are burglar and lover.

you're smooth in the fingers,
itching like a virgin.
blessed, perforated,
rotten and celebrated.

my mouth your weapon,
my guts but meat.
take your pen and gore me, then.
puncture and punctuate.

i'd be but holes for you, if you would only fill them.