Editing lyrics
I'm only reviving this silent-since-2013 blog because now the whole world knows what "valar morghulis" means. But since I have your attention:
My choir is performing a song with unecessary gendered language in the lyrics. Our conductor gave me permission to change the words.
The original:
We pray for healing of our people
We pray for healing of the land
For peace for every race and nation
Every child, every woman, every man
Now I'm struggling to fix it poetically. The rhythm in the song is very specific, so the scansion has to be flawless.
We pray for healing of our people
We pray for healing of the earth
For strength to fight against justice
For the love that humanity is worth
That's all I got. Let me know in the next 2 hours if you have a better idea.
My choir is performing a song with unecessary gendered language in the lyrics. Our conductor gave me permission to change the words.
The original:
We pray for healing of our people
We pray for healing of the land
For peace for every race and nation
Every child, every woman, every man
Now I'm struggling to fix it poetically. The rhythm in the song is very specific, so the scansion has to be flawless.
We pray for healing of our people
We pray for healing of the earth
For strength to fight against justice
For the love that humanity is worth
That's all I got. Let me know in the next 2 hours if you have a better idea.