Comments | vain_glorious: SGA_flashfic: Fang Mouth Bang (Burning Up Challenge, Gen, PG-13)

vain_glorious

SGA_flashfic: Fang Mouth Bang (Burning Up Challenge, Gen, PG-13)

Apr 27, 2008 23:28

It was hard to think. He had a headache, the kind that stretched around his entire skull such that he could feel the tension throbbing even in his cheekbones. There was a sour taste in his mouth and his eyes were thick with sleep. He raised one hand and rubbed at his face, trying to clear his vision. If he could see better, maybe everything would ( Read more... )

keller, teyla, sheppard, sgateam, rodney, ronon

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drufan July 25 2008, 00:57:12 UTC

This was just plane ole fun. Combative and hallucinating Sheppard, marvelous combo. The poor team!

vain_glorious July 25 2008, 01:32:07 UTC

Thanks so much for the feedback! I really appreciate a comment even long after it's first 'published' and most people don't bother. :)

sholio July 27 2008, 21:09:40 UTC

*winces* Oh, poor team, trying to take care of a hallucinating and dangerous Sheppard! I really like how you kept it in his POV, including his misconceptions about the team, so at first the reader is uncertain as well.

vain_glorious July 27 2008, 21:22:28 UTC

Thank you for the feedback! I really appreciate you leaving comments on older stories. Most people don't bother. :)

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vain_glorious August 21 2008, 03:40:41 UTC

Thanks for the comment, glad you liked. :)

kataren December 2 2008, 17:04:50 UTC

LOL!! Last line's a killer; can actually imagine little-boy-lost-please-forgive-me John. ^^

Do you have any locked entries? Cos I feel bad whenever I friend someone just to read (really) good stuff, even if that someone doesn't mind. And I'd like to come back & thoroughly explore at leisure during my break. Now, to sleep, before I irritate you with another comment on another fic today. :P

vain_glorious December 2 2008, 17:16:18 UTC

Absolutely nothing is f-locked. And feel free to friend away, that's what the journal is here for.

And never apologize for commenting, it makes up for all the people that read fic and click away without so much as a word. That's what really makes me sad.

sky3428 August 16 2009, 07:48:24 UTC

I loved John's POV, seeing his confusion and his recognition of being drugged and captured by aliens. He is very coherent with "functional thought processes" but no where did he recognized he was hallucinating - interesting drug! How he managed to kick his team's butt is just awesome. I found it hilarious that his fingers had to be restrained too. Hmm, for him to have been restrained in the infirmary must have meant that he awoke earier and was combative? Sheppard's so going to get payback!! This was very fun. Thank you.

vain_glorious August 16 2009, 13:33:44 UTC

Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you enjoyed. And of course Sheppard's fingers had to be restrained to protect Ronon's precious hair. ;)