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[girlchild]

sunstroke; juri/shiori, 100 words. (also known as the drabble i tastefully refrained from titling who loves the sun.)

Comments

[spheeris1]

I think that is about the best...hell, what is the word? [lol]
Juri being like the sun, her gaze able to burn--is perfection.

[girlchild]

*giggles* not sure what the word is... unless it's "nonsense from you i've read lately", in which case, fair enough!

thanks very much for reading, and doubly so for commenting. *^^*

[quietisrafel]

I especially liked the line, "she knew the glossy pink newborn body underneath the burned shell had to be more like juri's." It suggests the admiration Shiori had for Juri, and her longing to be like her since she feels so inferior. But, as the imagery suggests, it hurts because she isn't Juri, and could never hope to be that same kind of radiance. The imagery is very vivid and appropriate for conveying this kind of pain. The comparison of Juri being the sun also worked extremely well. Splendid!

[girlchild]

thank you very much for reading! (i'm tempted to write a follow up comparing shiori to the moon. ^^;)

[quietisrafel]

Mm, Shiori as the moon... I'd certainly be interested in reading a drabble like that.

By the way, where did you find the picture to make the icon you posted this drabble with? It's very cute!

[girlchild]

oooh, charming! shiori is the moon in the tarot, you know-- that's where i got the idea from for both, though mitsuru is the sun there.

and thanks! the picture's from a doujinshi that i deeply covet.

[mysticmysterya]

Comparing Juri to the sun is just perfect. I loved the drabble. ^_^

[girlchild]

thank you very much! glad you liked.

also-- your icon is tres cool. *^^*

[mysticmysterya]

Thanks. ^^