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usakpopluvr

Taemins Game

Mar 09, 2011 20:38

Rating:NC-17
pairing TopTaeminxJonghyun
genre PWP SHAMEFUL SMUT
Summary umm contiuned from Drabble after lots of encouragemet I am finally able to actually write this damn thing.

...."You deserve to be punished~."

( Click to readd my some epic battle to write a somewhat decent smut comments are fucking loved )

smut, taemin, jonghyun, top!taeminxjonghyun

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Continue This!^^ mickota March 13 2011, 20:26:15 UTC

This is the one you want an opinion on, correct?
Before I start, I will apologize ahead of time if I offend you in anyway.(I'm a harsh critic.) Please do not be angry with me? :D

Hmm, first I think a template or a guideline would be nice. Like a format so the reader does not get confused with who is talking verbally and when the character's are thinking.
If it's written in first person, I do not recommend using Italic for what is happening, rather save that for thoughts.
Some people, in my opinion, will look away from the screen because the slanted writing is annoying.
Um, this is an unbeta? Spellcheck :P (that thing is my weapon xD)
Unless you do not want to, it's fine. (Grammar errors are just a pet peeve of mine so you can ignore me ke ke ke).

If you end up deciding to write more, I will be happy to give advice...if you want. I feel like I've just made an enemy TT.TT I'm sorry if I sounded too cruel!!! >.Um, it's your journal so feel free to delete this and ignore me? heh, heh ( ... )

Re: Continue This!^^ usakpopluvr March 13 2011, 20:33:20 UTC

wahhh thank u thank u thank u i really need that and made just he oppitsite since i was wondering could you have more than one beta and if you can would you be willing to bi mine!
yeah and i was wondering for when a differnet person talks would have to like skip 2 lines or something idkkkk first time and how amny words do you need for it be a actual story and should you plan ahead or just go withit tehn would yous use the italic words for stuff that is said will a differetn tone or actions IDFK HELPPPP!

Re: Continue This!^^ mickota March 13 2011, 21:03:33 UTC

Ack! You're so cute! >wI think you can have as many editors as you wish (as long as others do not get jealous :P ( ... )

Re: Continue This!^^ usakpopluvr March 13 2011, 21:17:59 UTC

WAHHHHH thanks you that wass sooooooooooo helpful will you do the honors of being my beta kkekekek it sounds like i am trying to marry you blahhhh
SOOOOO! what exactly do betas do as in you do i write everything and you make the changes cuz thabe just fine as it it s still my eork
OHHHS AND i write them down in a journal first i ahve my friend read it tgen telll what i should od next ten add me own twist and what i did above be a darbble idkkkkkkk but how do i get to you for it to betaed idekkkkk!

Re: Continue This!^^ mickota March 13 2011, 21:23:53 UTC

Ahahaha of course I accept ^o^
Well, private messages would be most easiest I suppose, or email.
That's good to have someone look over your work. I will send you a private massage now~

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