Twelfth Night...

[urbankazoos]

So here it is, ya'll--Chapter 9. It's definitely one of my favorites and there's a reason. Watch our for the perspective here in the beginning. It's important! Thanks so much for your feedback. Hope to see a bit more of it, maybe. But if not, I hope you're still reading, at least. It would be a shame if I was just writing this for myself...and my

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[nautic187]

I've said it before but I love how differently you're able to write your perspective shifts, there's never any doubt in my mind when it occurs or who the first person is. Who else but the amazing Kat would inner dialogue a line like: ...because in the human interaction quilt, the patches are literally covering something up and the seams are lies and romantic relationships frolic in the chaos like innocent children in a field of land mines.?

And I love how she brought some celery over to her intervention, haha. This is intriguing and kind of heartbreaking: “Why would she be jealous of me?” she asks. It’s sincere-not even a pathetic fish for compliments. It pains me to realize just how pure she was meant to but couldn’t be. We only had Ashley's explanation about what happened at the beginning because it's the thing that Spencer won't, probably can't talk or think about about without breaking, but it's a nice reminder that there's more going on under the surface than even just the serpentine high-school crush storyline.

And of course Ashley's line and Spencer's followup quote from the yearbook. There aren't enough eyerolls in the world for Kat as she watches them wallow in their denial.

And you'd almost have to take Spencer along on the trip to Half Moon Bay to take her mind off what a scumbag her girlfriend was, wouldn't you?

[urbankazoos]

I always count on you as my compass for how well I'm succeeding in my chapter by chapter writing goals. In fact, as I was writing the first paragraph of Kat, I thought, "If nautic immediately picks up on the fact that this is a new perspective, I'll consider it mission accomplished." And so you did. Yay me :)

Oh--and of course you noticed the celery. Just a bit of continuity.

So yeah, there are a lot of underlying issues still. As a ff writer, I can hopefully draw those out and deal with them in a pace that fits the story realistically. Both Spencer and Ashley are ignoring these really big parts of themselves in the present, as well as historically. Breaking the characters down so that they can deal with that through inner and outer monologue/dialogue will be the challenge to me--and I'm very excited about it.

Is Spencer tagging along for the HMB trip? And if so, how many eyerolls will Kat NOT suppress? These are questions that will be answered with the next chapter.

[nautic187]

Well, you kinda tipped it off in the beginning with that "watch out for the perspective" thing, but the point is you don't really need to. On the other hand, I just saw someone admit to being confused about an obvious flashback segment (written all in italic) in another story, and have seen people ask for script style writing because it was apparently too hard for them to decipher first person perspective in another, so, um, yeah...

Also I totally forgot to mention but Jena Fucking Malone. I loved her in Donnie Darko and Saved, but yeah, haven't really seen much of her lately.