Hello, hello, hello...

Aug 23, 2010 13:51


It's my last week of classes for the quarter, so I wanted to get this out before the madness ensues. Message to all of you now silent feedbackers: Stop it, please. Thank you.

Enjoy!

New chapter! )

wake up youre here

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anonymous August 28 2010, 02:50:47 UTC
While it's a constant refrain, I will repeat it again sincerely, this was so well written. I can't even describe how much I feel for Ashley, then and now. You set it up so well that I think I see her in the restaurant wearing a cat sweatshirt (i picture embellishments - like glowing eyes) and so aware of Spencer across from her, simultaneously hoping and worrying that Spencer will finally meet her eyes and know her. To see her, so hyper aware and achingly observant of Spencer today - worrying that those moments in high school may have all in her head and to see, although she may not admit it, that she has a place in Spencer's life now.

The pacing again was flawless. I really like "the why." Kat has me wondering if Spencer knows the why - why she invited Robin over after Ashley left for her date. Hell, Kat has me wondering if I know the why.

I wish Ashley and Spencer stopped protecting their hearts and allowed themselves to be more bold. Although I like that Spencer sought Ashley out, I think acting to break the quiet of her apartment instead of passively letting in the noise - is a step forward.

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urbankazoos September 4 2010, 07:41:45 UTC
Please, don't refrain :)

I TOTALLY PICTURE EMBELLISHMENTS---YESSSSSSS! I'm glad we're on the same page with the cat sweatshirt. That's important.

"Achingly observant..." Maybe YOU should be the one writing this, because that really sums it up quite well. You're hitting all the subtleties I hope are seen by the achingly observant reader, and I wish I could point them out without feeling like I'm giving away a little too much, but just know--EXACTLY.

Lovely.

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