edit: OMG this is so cuteee~ this is like one of the best fics ever, and it's my shoupon favourite >w< i seriously thought hiroto was going to ask shou to marry him or something XD
Kya~! You have no idea how happy that makes me :'D Fufufu, Hiroto s such a mess at this, he'll probably do something really close (and cheesy) to that >W
i really love this fic >< i feel really happy when you update it C: i felt that it was a big step for hiroto to do it. and then when shou found out that dress i was like "wait it's a dress and frilly... it's a wedding dress! hiroto's gonna propose to shou and shou's gonna wear a frilly dress at their wedding!" X'DDD (sorry if it sound too bad though)
Ahahaha omg thats so cute >W< I bet shou wouldn't mind a wedding~ yeah, it really was, hes finally realized that shou is not an omen but the key to his overall happiness. I never really said this, but it was implied that hiroto was in a state of depression after he left his parents houde and pretty much disowned. He always felt alone (he won't admit it to anyone) even if there were always people surrounding him. Its nice that he finally has someone. For shou too. There is so much I haven't said about the two... ah this turned out long >< thank you again ♥
i always felt that there was something wrong with hiroto and that he had an awkward relationship with his parents.... but he never actually explained why and even though shou has his prostitute past and kind of explained what happened he doesnt tal about it deeply and i get the feeling that his happy-go-lucky and extremely happy self is just a mask, like a shell protecting him from his feelings from his prostitution days.
Yeah, i'm planning on making a chapter all about Hiroto's life from start to the time before he met Shou ( maybe make it the prologue) >,< I agree with the Shou theory. After each client he would spend with he felt 'disgust, regret & shame' but to survive the harsh world, he put on a smile and marched forward. Like you said, he put a mask on. He doesn't want anyone to think he's weak. To know that his biggest fear is to be/called useless. Hiroto and Shou have very different backgrounds but the two were just as broken. I want to say soooo much about these two, but it's so hard to explain their characters with out writing 10 paragraphs.
*O* yeah you should! >w< i guessed! omg you should write like a prologue about hiroto and one about shou, just like you're going to write hiroto's life from the start you should write shou's as well, and that thing that happened with shou's dad and such (if i remember it right) and... what happened to shou's mum? i dont remember if you have writtend about it XD and it's so interesting that hiroto and shou are so different but share such similar feelings and life experiences okay i need to stop now or I would just write a huge text fangirling on you fic XD
Okay! I will, I should really get to it, I really hate updating late. But its never something I can do about it, school and life are just so unpredictable. I think I'll do hirotos first. Should I make it the prologue or just make it ch. 22? Ah yeah, it was shou"s dad and in a angry fit, he killed her and shou watched. I don't mind at all! It makes me happy that my story intrest you. Like you have nooo I dea~
hummm, i think it'd look good if you did it as chapter 22, as an intermission in the story ** and then it'd look nice if it were hiroto telling his story and not the narrator, it'd be like hiroto looking back at his life or something (if you'd like to do it like that). AHHHH i remember it now, he killed her... and then shou ran away right? and what happened to his dad? is he alive? if he is, then i wonder if shou will see him again some day... when he's stronger. i always wondered what happened to shou's dad to become like that all of a sudden... and does shou have sibiling or something? anyone from his family?
Ah, first person, thats difficult. Especially since im so bad at describing feelings/emotions. But we'll see, I might need your help if I do end up doing first person. No, shou's dad is also dead. He died of an illness. Shou hates it because hr can't get revenge. Nope, no family. Even if he did shou wouldn't want to be anywhere near them. Ah, its confusing, I really do need to make a background ch. On him ;;
oO really? well, you really dont describe the feelings of your characters but i was able to see how they felt just by the story itself xD not all stories need buckets of feels~ ohhh i can help you revise it and such, it'd be like an honour but i think i shouldnt help you in the writing nor should you change your way of writing if you cant write first person, then it wouldnt be your story >_< but omg yes i can help you with other stuff if you need asdfghjkl ahhhh i remember now! he dad died and he was mad he couldnt take revenge > < i was hoping so bad he'd see his dad again one day,,, his dad would be like homeless and miserable and all alone and shou'd be like all happy with hiroto with a great comfy house and their dogs ;w; and he'd be like "hey, remember me?"... yeah, if he had relatives maybe that could be a twist in the story
Lol I know >< I won't make it to dramatic, but I just suck at first person in general. I have a fic on hold and its all first person and it pains me to read it ;; yeah, like if I need your revision or maybe an opinion I'll ask. Not sure about first person tho... then again im never to sure a boutaanything lol. We'll see how this turns out. Gah~ if I had such a plot twist this story would br like 700000000 chapters. But there is still one thing thats going to happen, shou and hiroto arent completely out of the forest yet. Fufufu
i'm so excited now >w< yes, do it how you can and how you feel like doing it! i'm here if you need anything~ *w* but... it'd be too bad if someone like shou's grandma or an aunt or something knew about his situation and just let him by himself all of those years... i'd never be able to like them.... ehhhh what does that mean? is hiroto going to introduce shou to his relatives or something? XD
just lemme read it
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OMG this is so cuteee~ this is like one of the best fics ever, and it's my shoupon favourite >w<
i seriously thought hiroto was going to ask shou to marry him or something XD
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i felt that it was a big step for hiroto to do it. and then when shou found out that dress i was like "wait it's a dress and frilly... it's a wedding dress! hiroto's gonna propose to shou and shou's gonna wear a frilly dress at their wedding!" X'DDD (sorry if it sound too bad though)
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i am waiting for the next chapter! x3
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>w< i guessed! omg you should write like a prologue about hiroto and one about shou, just like you're going to write hiroto's life from the start you should write shou's as well, and that thing that happened with shou's dad and such (if i remember it right) and... what happened to shou's mum? i dont remember if you have writtend about it XD
and it's so interesting that hiroto and shou are so different but share such similar feelings and life experiences
okay i need to stop now or I would just write a huge text fangirling on you fic XD
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ohhh i can help you revise it and such, it'd be like an honour but i think i shouldnt help you in the writing nor should you change your way of writing if you cant write first person, then it wouldnt be your story >_< but omg yes i can help you with other stuff if you need asdfghjkl
ahhhh i remember now! he dad died and he was mad he couldnt take revenge > < i was hoping so bad he'd see his dad again one day,,, his dad would be like homeless and miserable and all alone and shou'd be like all happy with hiroto with a great comfy house and their dogs ;w; and he'd be like "hey, remember me?"... yeah, if he had relatives maybe that could be a twist in the story
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i'm here if you need anything~ *w*
but... it'd be too bad if someone like shou's grandma or an aunt or something knew about his situation and just let him by himself all of those years... i'd never be able to like them....
ehhhh what does that mean? is hiroto going to introduce shou to his relatives or something? XD
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okay /sobs and weeps and everything/
i'll be waiting ;w;
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