all the pieces of the break evaporate

[untitledminds]

Title: all the pieces of the break evaporate
Pairing(s): Junmyeon/Jongdae, minor!Sehun/Lu Han
Rating: PG-13
Word count: ~6,800
Summary: Dealing with fourteen barking dogs who like to poop is the least of Jongdae’s concerns.
Warning(s): Occasional swearing
Written for criticalcapture special round: give love

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[tsukarerudesu]

“Hello?” comes Jongin’s frantic voice. “Jongdae can you please pick me up? I’m at the hospital.”

Ever since I tore my ligament the same time Jongin did I have infinitely tripled my feels for him. So reading pics of his injury always hurt a little more, maybe its me being overly emotional or sentimental, IDK. But I did adore how optimistic the feeling around his injury is, and even though Jongdae is reluctant to help he is aware of the intensity of what this means to Jongin. I liked this part of the friendship, even if Jondae won’t ever admit it openly, he cares a lot .

“Did you always suck this much at parking?” remarks Jongin. “Did you always suck this much at dancing?” -OUCH but hilarous, because it sets up their dynamic nicely.

Jongdae doesn’t have the optimism to chase a dream like that. Sometimes, when he works closing time shifts and he stands alone in the dimming room of the florist, he wishes that he was as good at songwriting as Jongin was at dancing, so he could do what he loved too. -THE REALNESS right here. This is very accurately capturing what and how hard it is to want to do something but not have confidence in skill or abilities. I feel this on a very strong level.

“He’s always so dramatic,” laments Sehun. “I don’t understand why he can’t be chill like me.” -LMAO SEHUN YOURE SPENDING MONEY ON A BREAK UP BOUQUET THO?!

“I thought it would be hard to get some fresh air on your crutches so I thought I would bring the fresh air to you.” -WHERE CAN I FIND A FRIEND LIKE THIS

Jongin bursts into laughter and clutches his stomach, “You’re literally taking a couple of dogs for a walk, you didn’t need to gel your hair.” -Oh Jongin, you potato.

he hears Junmyeon call after him but okay poop can wait until later, this dog, however, cannot. What if he runs onto the road and is hit by a car? -Jongdae why you trying so hard not to be a sweetheart? Just give in, your a nice guy not a tough cold hearted jaded soul. Like me

“Since when have you owned six dogs and Monggu?” Sehun asks. - I typically am not too fond of Oh Sehun but DUDE you’re version of Sehun is so ENDEARINGLY dumb, like with a late of geniuene innocence, stop doing this to me. Please keep doing this to Sehun.

“Really?” Chanyeol’s eyes light up. “No,” Jongdae confesses, earning a frown from Chanyeol. -Resident hope crusher, Kim Jongdae.

Jongdae has this theory that if he never goes to sleep, morning will never come and he will never be forced to face the problems that the next day will bring. -I tried this, 5am still came and my alarm still went off and I looked like a raccoon. Not recommended.

Jongin continues. “But who the fuck cares about what they think. At the end of the day, you’ll still have me, and that’s all that really matters, right?” -YES.

“You’re fucking welcome!” Jongin yells from inside his apartment which is fitted with very thin walls. -YESSSS.

I got character limited, splitting my comment into TWO.

[tsukarerudesu]

OKAY SO

1) FREAKING friendship dynamics. I love the ease of the push and pull, though its mostly just shoving of innocent cushions. You can someone feel the history between the two with how nothing is taken in the wrong manner and there is no bite between (potentially mean) words.

2)Junmyeon is so soft, Jongdae totally needs someone soft given how rough the outside world can be. And a man who still buys flowers, <3 <3 <3

3) Oh Sehun you little thing.

4) Life is rooting for Jongdae, yay!

5) Kim Jongin I adore you and your weirdly positive but serious but youthful but clingy self. The best wingman to have for someone like Jongdae. But I am bias and this is Jongin.

I really liked the pacing and explanation of Jongdae’s character. How he has come to be, why he is working and maybe the small snippets of what is holding him back. It’s hard, life is a hard thing to do on your own. Especially when you’re making compromises so you can still eat at the end of the month or watch dramas or feel like you’re doing what you can. I resonate with this feeling a lot.

Thanks for writing & sharing !

[untitledminds]

what did i do to deserve an angel like you ;; i just need to take a deep breath to take in this AMAZING LONG COMMENT like woAH i never could have dreamed that ppl would have this much to say about anything that i wrote/good thoughts about it so thank you so so so so much <3 ppl like you are the reason writers keep on writing

you tore your ligament?? oh no :(( i hope you're much better now, i once had a friend who tore her ligament and the injury never fully went away so she had to discontinue sport bc she kept hurting herself.

i have always loved the snarky characterisation of jongdae, with crude humour but a wonderful, good heart deep down so i reflected that here...i also love fun friendships filled w/ banter but are extremely loyal deep down <3 my absolute goal in life

SEHUN WILL ALWAYS BE DUMB LET'S NOT TALK ABT THIS

AND YES JUNMYEON IS AN ABSOLUTE SWEETHEART I NEED A FRIEND LIKE HIM TOO

also on the eve of my english exam aka my worst subject that completely stresses me out i never wanted to fall asleep (even tho the theory of it is completely dumb) bc i never wanted morning to come so that was a personal experience hahaha

thank you so much for reading this and commenting such wonderful things i'm so so so glad you enjoyed it!! and that you loved the dynamics of jongin/jongdae's friendship and junmyeon (flowers yes my weakness ;;) and oh sehun and the pacing and jongdae's character and that you could relate to it ... this is by far one of the comments that has impacted me most and made me so unbelievably happy and i'll always come back to this when im having a hard time w/ writing thank you thank you thank you i hope you have a lovely day and year <3