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LOST - A World of Poems and Paintings

Jul 10, 2009 14:52

Title: A World of Poems and Paintings
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: LOST
Pairing: Jack/Juliet (S/K and J/K references)
Summary: He wants to say you're not on your own now. You're not on your own. But he doesn't, because he doesn't think he could stand it if she said she still was. Even now. With him.
Word Count: 800-summat.
Warning(s): AU. (Post-Season 4 Finale ( Read more... )

character: jack shephard, fanfic: lost, pairing: jack/juliet, rating: pg-13, table: 30_wounds, character: juliet burke

Comments 22

hintofawhisper July 11 2009, 02:33:06 UTC

Oh, wow. This was really beautiful. First off, I LOVE the AU plotline-- both Jack & Juliet staying behind on the island; to me, it's almost like a part two to that S/K fic, where they were the ones who left the island, but this time we get to see what happened to J/J.

He imagines that if he presses too hard it will shatter and the shards will dig into his palms and the blood, his blood, will mar her beautiful perfect skin, long bright trails running down her face, and her arms, half-reproachful, will wrap around his neck as he falls headfirst into the thick overwhelming waves that lap just at their feet, always just at their feet. He doesn't know whether it's paranoia, or premonition, or just another nebulous invention of his messy, overstrained mind.

Ahh, your descriptions have me in awe. This is gorgeous, and so true to Jack; I love how he views her here, the awkwardness and tentativeness.

Sometimes her hair catches in her mouth when she runs too fast or turns her head too sharply; she flicks it away impatiently and he looks ( ... )

angela_weber July 11 2009, 05:00:53 UTC

*runs, tackles, hugs and hugs you* Thank you so, so much for your amazing kind words!! :D :D It's so much more than what this fic deserves. Your feedback is always the best, really, and I have told you this before, because you are always so detailed and awesome about picking out your favorite parts. It really makes me happy. ♥

This really is sort of a part 2 to my S/K, so I am so glad that that's how you read this! (I meant to include some . . . actual plot in this fic as well, and take it a few years down the line, but you know what they say about good intentions. ;))

There's just that awkwardness to it; even though they're comforting each other, it doesn't feel right to both of them, but they're trying to ignore that. At least, that's the way it was conveyed to me. I could be wrong. XD

No, you're totally right! imo, the main issue with J/J has always been circumstance. Their situation always prevents them from getting close enough. Exhibit A: glass walls. So, yeah, there is an awkwardness and an "off" feeling here, because they' ( ... )

hintofawhisper July 12 2009, 01:33:39 UTC

*hugs back* You are very, very welcome! I'm so glad that my feedback made you happy; your fics are always amazing and deserve as much praise as I can give you. :D

This really is sort of a part 2 to my S/K, so I am so glad that that's how you read this! (I meant to include some . . . actual plot in this fic as well, and take it a few years down the line, but you know what they say about good intentions. ;))

Hee, well good, I'm glad I was right in assuming that. And don't worry; this fic was good enough without plot, of course. ;)

No, you're totally right! imo, the main issue with J/J has always been circumstance. Their situation always prevents them from getting close enough. Exhibit A: glass walls. So, yeah, there is an awkwardness and an "off" feeling here, because they're still stuck on this island when they both want to leave more than anything else in the world, and he's still mourning and feeling responsible for Kate (and everyone else who was supposedly on the boat!), who's been "dead' all of two weeks, and we know that Jack ( ... )

angela_weber July 12 2009, 13:36:52 UTC

Ditto! ♥ :D

I'm glad that you agree with me about them here--God, the more I write this scenario the more I wish Jack had jumped! It would have been so much healthier for him. I mean, there are no bridges on the island, at least, right? And--really--I think it would've been better for J/K. I mean, look at what happens to them off the island. Nothing happening is, I think, almost preferable. / tangent

I just can't help but think of J/K, even when I'm reading a J/J fic. XD And the fact that you make me think of them with your fics just goes to show even more how great you are at this!

Haha, well, you know that I understand. ;) And awww, thank you so much! I think it goes to show more that I'm cheating, but I definitely prefer your interpretation. :D

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coffeecrisp7 July 11 2009, 03:57:43 UTC

This is gold. Seriously. I always wondered what would have happened if Jack jumped instead of Sawyer, and this looks pretty damn amazing to me. It was so beautifully written and so Jack/Juliet. I love Jack rehearsing apologies in his head, because they are both so romantically stunted, and I think that was part of the reason why they didn't work out to be honest. I miss them so much! Wonderful job, especially with so few Jack/Juliet fics around nowadays ♥

angela_weber July 11 2009, 05:04:53 UTC

Oh, wow, thank you so much for the lovely comment!

I've always wondered the same thing, and the more I think about it/write it, the more I wish he had jumped, really. It certainly would've been a healthier thing for his character than what happened to him off the island! And I agree; they are really both very romantically and emotionally immature, as brilliant as they are mentally, and that has always been one of their major roadbloacks.

Thank you again; I am so very happy that you enjoyed this! :D

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angela_weber July 11 2009, 13:15:43 UTC

Oh, thank you so much for your kind words! I have seriously grown to love these two together, and so it really means a lot that you liked this. I'm especially glad that you liked the ending! Thank you again for the lovely comment! :D

missy_useless July 11 2009, 16:44:03 UTC

fjdfojkfndfngheiw! GUH! The same procedure as always: I don't have time (actually, I didn't even have the time to read this ;)) and I'll be back with a proper comment as soon as I can. For now just: dhajjeguijflsrhbe!!! You killed me. Thank you so much for writing this! *worships you forever*

angela_weber July 11 2009, 17:11:18 UTC

Eeeee, you are basically the goddess of J/J fic, so your approval, as always, means SO much to me. Thank you so much, love!! :D No rush--I am just thrilled that you enjoyed it. And no need to worship, haha. ;)

missy_useless July 13 2009, 18:50:02 UTC

I'm baaaaaaaaaaaaack. ;)

First of all: My God, I am so unbelievably happy that you are apparently starting to get used to the idea of J/J because woah, you write them so incredibly beautifully and guh, I'm speechless. Completely speechless. *reads it again and again*

Sometimes when he touches her, or, more often, nearly touches her, he imagines he can still feel a layer of glass glistening between them, just barely smudged by her fingerprints, a hard cool surface that makes him think of rain and the hospital, all misted up by his hot breath.I already told you that I love that sentence, but ... you know - this has to be one of the most perfect opening lines of all time. Wonderful! *dies* And then we have the whole scenario: this beautiful, perfect scenario in which Jack jumps and stays behind and is with Juliet - Juliet who wanted nothing more than to leave - and maybe they think that the ones on the chopper, on the freighter are dead, Kate dead. And Claire! And Ethan! And ... just wow! I love this fic so, so much (I want to quote ( ... )

angela_weber July 13 2009, 19:27:12 UTC

Ohhhh, thank you thank you thank you! You are far, far too kind to me! Wow! :D Thank you SO much! I don't even know what to say in response--it is so lovely of you to leave such wonderful, detailed feedback, especially on a J/J fic, because as I said before, you are the reigning expert on them and your opinion means the world. *hugs tightly*

First:

I am so unbelievably happy that you are apparently starting to get used to the idea of J/J

Heh . . . don't tell anyone--but it didn't take much. I've more than just gotten used to the idea; I love them almost as much as I love my poor, neglected OTP at the moment (and could possibly love them just as much if it weren't for S/J). And that is saying a lot. >.< It's all your fault! ;)

Thank you again for being so wonderful and sweet! I'm so unbelievably thrilled that you liked this! :D (And by the way, I just saw your other comment and that you posted a Jack/Boone fic--yayyyy!--but I've got some work to do; I'll be there as soon as I can!)

valhalla37 July 11 2009, 16:48:24 UTC

Augh, this is GORGEOUS. (Like all your work, but still.) I love the imagery of the glass between them at the beginning, and the way it echoes throughout it all -- and then the ending. Siiiiiigh. This is truly, truly beautiful -- I think I remember a couple lines from that meme you did a while back, and I'm so, so glad it managed to see the light of day. :D

angela_weber July 11 2009, 17:07:11 UTC

You have a Jack icon! Wheeeee! *dances* ;)

That said, wow, thank you so much! I am SO happy that you liked this. And yes, this is the fic I previewed in that meme--I've been sitting on it for a few weeks now, which is forever for me, and it very nearly didn't see the light of day, so yay that you enjoyed it! :D I really, really appreciate your taking the time to read and leaving such an amazing comment. Thank you again!