i wrote this comment on AO3, but now it's down for maintenance :/araliasJanuary 27 2014, 23:45:18 UTC
hello - ok, i am back! i just re-read it again :D and i still really really like it. i have in fact quite recently gone on a rant about avon being submissive and the way it is portrayed in fics, so it is clearly a subject i feel quite strongly about, so by doing it well you have made me happy and impressed me. which is not to say that nobody else ever did it well before, but! this is a very good example.
i particularly like the beginning bit with avon in his crazy brain going 'BUT I CAN'T LET BLAKE KNOW THAT I LIKE THIS', even though blake is almost as supportive as you could possibly wish. so that's nice - and it's also nice to follow it through with him realising it is ok because blake knows him/isn't going to make assumptions. i also like that even though it's a really touchy and awkward subject, you're still sort of making jokes about it - and jokes that show how comfortable (hooray, and it's in character! but also nice) they are around each other i.e. “That increases the chance of this being reasonably well choreographed.” :D i
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i particularly like the beginning bit with avon in his crazy brain going 'BUT I CAN'T LET BLAKE KNOW THAT I LIKE THIS', even though blake is almost as supportive as you could possibly wish. so that's nice - and it's also nice to follow it through with him realising it is ok because blake knows him/isn't going to make assumptions. i also like that even though it's a really touchy and awkward subject, you're still sort of making jokes about it - and jokes that show how comfortable (hooray, and it's in character! but also nice) they are around each other i.e. “That increases the chance of this being reasonably well choreographed.” :D i ( ... )
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