don't take offense, better make amends, rip it all to shreds and let it go

[uninformed]

I wasn't going to post this. I was going to let it die a horrible death on my WIP list, hoping to possibly be revived at some very later date.

And then sasuran decided to withhold Chad/Ichigo until I posted it and her tactics got the better of me

Comments

[sasuran]

First comment dance! First comment dance!

*giggles* This fic is ADORABLE, Eir! I loves it to bits. ^^.^^ I love that 'the emperor' appears as a former character (rather than a strict retelling of the story).'

[sasuran]

Second comment dance! Second comment dance!

I have trouble choosing a favourite line.

"Then the kid joins the conversation and his voice actually cracks and goes up a full octave, so you know that whatever it is, you really, really don't want to know" is certainly among them. :D

[uninformed]

I told you that was my favourite bit :P I'm glad you liked it! :D

I also found Swan Lake, if you want to borrow it. It's an illustrated retelling, but it gives an idea. Also, my retelling of it? Fairly inaccurate O_o It'd been a lo~ong time since I'd read it O_o

[sasuran]

*LOL* I would love to see this other person's retelling as well, though I am quite happy with yours as well. It sounded all sweet and tragic. ... I can't really put a happy face to that, but there's a warm-fuzz attached.

This fic is filled with many lines of awesome.

Someone else had better comment soon, or I'm going to take it upon myself to comment on each and every one of them. ;P

[uninformed]

You might've already. There're only 47 people on my Flist.

[sasuran]

Third comment dance! Third comment dance! Lots of comments for Eir's fic!

(I know, I know, you're thinking, hurry up and post the doujin, @#@!$%%.)

I also very much like that the words die a /terrible/ death, rather than just dying in some boring old manner.

[uninformed]

I really am. I like comments on fic, but I think I like Chad/Ichigo doujinshi better...

[sasuran]

I lied, I am now trying the two-at-once thing.

Which will probably EXPLODE my internet, so maybe the doujinshi idea is better...

I will start wandering off to do that now.

[sasuran]

Fourth comment - 'Taru's getting to tired to dance. I'll do a little foot-shuffle in your honour instead.

My only suggestion for revision for a challenge is that I'm not sure about the paying being the 'important' part of the drivel... but I guess it is the important part of what Fai's saying... :\ I just know that my first thought on reading was "the important part is that that boy is NEKKID!"... but now looking back, I think it's technically correct...

So I don't really have any suggestions at all...

[uninformed]

*giggle* My issue with it was that I'd missed the point in the fairy tale, that it was a kid who pointed out the stupidity of the adults, but I couldn't think of a way to make that work for the pairing.

[sasuran]

Sakura or Syaoran, maybe?

Or Mokona? XD XD XD

But really, it stands perfectly as it is. I don't know that including the moral could make the fic any better, you know?

[uninformed]

I finished the fic and I liked it, so I didn't want to go back and change something fundamental about it -_-;; which is most of the reason I'm not sure I want to enter it into the challenge.

[sasuran]

Not that that's going to stop me from commenting...