dead and lovely: two
DEAD AND LOVELY: TWO
1416 words, PG-16
myungzy, romance/supernatural
( Suzy fades when the light is gone. She fades faster than I’d want to, and she’s gone with the dusk. My eyes will follow the faint light mirrored on the closed window, all orange and red. Her fingers are always placed seemly on her knees, and her eyes watch the world outside - but by then she’s already leaving. )
1416 words, PG-16
myungzy, romance/supernatural
( Suzy fades when the light is gone. She fades faster than I’d want to, and she’s gone with the dusk. My eyes will follow the faint light mirrored on the closed window, all orange and red. Her fingers are always placed seemly on her knees, and her eyes watch the world outside - but by then she’s already leaving. )
you already know how much i love the beginning paragraphs, they're so gorgeous and the whole painting/sunset description melts my heart since i have a weak spot for romantic, poetic like analogies and stuff.
"But I lean closer until I can count her flimsy eyelashes, and if she were real I’d be close enough to hear her heart beating, or see myself reflected on her charcoal eyes too; but she’s dead, dead, dead - and I kiss her anyway."
okay, i'm insanely in love with the whole 'if-i-touch-her-i'm-in-pain' ordeal, it's just that little edge that makes you so anxious on how they'll end up. plus, the 'It hurts everywhere - of course it hurts, it’s an abomination to touch her, it’s death.' nearly killed me. it sounded very much like myungsoo(?).
characterization is spot-on (in my head at least, because this is E X A C T L Y how i picture my myungsoo and suzy)!!! we are really and truly otp soul mates. especially this line: "(When did I start to care?)"
that line nearly killed me, it's probably my most favorite line? (despite the amazing description you've put into this)
ugh, i don't even know which myungzy fic of yours is my favorite anymore, this pretty much topped everything. i'm a sucker for pretty details, what can i do.
but i agree with yoldine, i am so glad you didn't make this nc-17. so glad that you didn't make him have sex with BONE DUST, JESUS CHRIST.
(not much of a meta, but here are my coherent feelings for now, and i'm adding this to my favorite fanfic list!)
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