I love the way you’re setting this up in Lily’s gallery - a nice *familiar* start for one such as I who only knows half of the ‘fandom’.
I love the way Andy looks at the pictures - that’s a lot like how I relate to art too. I also really liked your description of Andy’s reflection on the day, and how more than anything, it’s just overwhelming.
Andy’s attitude is awesome: “Andy raised an eyebrow. "Sounds more like you were eavesdropping than overhearing."” *grins*
And I think this: “"I'm sorry. It's something about her name. It adds an electrical charge of sorts to the air. You can't help but tune in when she's being discussed."” is one of the best descriptions of Miranda I’ve read. I love the way you’re able to distill that feeling into words.
Ooh wow! I love how you’re using Miranda to bring Bette and Andy together, and Andy’s reaction to Bette’s revelations! :)
Jaw drops: “bruised fucking egos, sexual tension, and rugburn." You know you’re so going to have to write that, don’t you? *dies*
This:
“That woman…" Bette sighed. "She marred my soul."
"What did she do?"
Bette raised an eyebrow. "You have met her, haven't you?" - *just* perfect. I love it! :)
Oh, and I love the graffiti / ‘tagged’ - what a perfect analogy.
You have this amazing way of writing so much in so few words, yet still leaving us hanging, wanting more. The mix of emotions in this was incredible - the lust, bitterness, indignation, curiousity, and did I detect a hint of jealousy from Andy too? You realise you're going to need to do a prequel and a sequel to this, right? I am intrigued by Bette's hints, and would love to see what Andy would do with her new-found knowledge... :)
I love the way Andy looks at the pictures - that’s a lot like how I relate to art too. I also really liked your description of Andy’s reflection on the day, and how more than anything, it’s just overwhelming.
Andy’s attitude is awesome: “Andy raised an eyebrow. "Sounds more like you were eavesdropping than overhearing."” *grins*
And I think this: “"I'm sorry. It's something about her name. It adds an electrical charge of sorts to the air. You can't help but tune in when she's being discussed."” is one of the best descriptions of Miranda I’ve read. I love the way you’re able to distill that feeling into words.
Ooh wow! I love how you’re using Miranda to bring Bette and Andy together, and Andy’s reaction to Bette’s revelations! :)
Jaw drops: “bruised fucking egos, sexual tension, and rugburn." You know you’re so going to have to write that, don’t you? *dies*
This:
“That woman…" Bette sighed. "She marred my soul."
"What did she do?"
Bette raised an eyebrow. "You have met her, haven't you?"
- *just* perfect. I love it! :)
Oh, and I love the graffiti / ‘tagged’ - what a perfect analogy.
You have this amazing way of writing so much in so few words, yet still leaving us hanging, wanting more. The mix of emotions in this was incredible - the lust, bitterness, indignation, curiousity, and did I detect a hint of jealousy from Andy too? You realise you're going to need to do a prequel and a sequel to this, right? I am intrigued by Bette's hints, and would love to see what Andy would do with her new-found knowledge... :)
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