Mouse or Cat or Girl or …

[ubimod]

Fandom: Firefly
Canon Compliancy: Set between “War Stories” and “Objects in Space.”
Character: River
Rating: G
Genre: Drama
Word Count: ~700
Prompt: 22 Unseen
Disclaimer: Not mine; no money.

Summary: River’s stages of being (or language and lucidity).

Written for still_grrr and posted there.

Award winner - details here.

Comments

[dknightshade]

Beautiful and sad. I love how some of the lines of prose have rhyme and a rhythm like the poetry. You've got an excellent grasp on River's voice - flickering back and forth between silly and incoherent and scientific and philosophical.

they don’t misfire … I misfire

For some reason this line just jumps out at me.

Very well done.

[ubiquirk]

Thanks! I'm really glad you thought this was in character!

flickering back and forth between silly and incoherent and scientific and philosophical

That's so good to hear!

[jackiejlh]

That was wonderful. So sad, so... River. I think you've got her voice spot on, and it's just awesome.

Omg how did I not know that you write Firefly? *lurkingly fangirls you even harder than before*

[ubiquirk]

Thanks! It's really good to hear that you like my writing, no matter the fandom!

You don't have to lurk - friends?

[jackiejlh]

Friends. :D

[ubiquirk]

Wonderful! [And I had no idea you even read my stuff - hee!]

[ceslas]

If I were a mouse, Serenity would be my house,
But since I’m a cat, it’s simply where I’m at.

This plays beautifully to the meter and rhythm of River's voice as articulated so achingly by Summer. Her embodiment of River is such that this piece feels as though I have seen it. Truly beautiful. Memory'ing...

[ubiquirk]

Thanks! I'm so happy that you liked it so much and found her voice to be true! It was fun to think of her using language to try to force herself into peaceful simplicity.

[vikingprincess]

this is perfect River mind-space. I love it.

[ubiquirk]

Thanks! It's so good to hear that you enjoyed it!

[hereswith]

Beautifully done. I liked this very much.

[ubiquirk]

Thanks! I'm very glad that you liked it!