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tylashke

Holiday Plans

Dec 25, 2010 23:29

Dedicated to rii_no_ame for all her wonderful fics, especially her ByaRen(s) and KaienShuu, and for being around. ♥ Somehow I think Byakuya ended up a tad OOC here. :/ I blame the muse.

( Even though the subsequent throngs of crowds had bothered him, he had taken delight in the redhead’s amazement at the bright and colourful lighting. )

bleach, renji, fanfiction, one-shot, byakuya

Comments 8

kuro_wolf December 25 2010, 21:33:44 UTC

This was so utterly beautiful and gorgeous!
It was just so romantic and Byakuya at then was just so cute and sweet :D

tylashke December 27 2010, 15:44:20 UTC

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you found it romantic. ^^

chaoticmayhem December 26 2010, 20:08:41 UTC

It was really sweet and well thought out. Thank you for the fic.

tylashke December 27 2010, 15:44:47 UTC

Thanks for reading! =)

rii_no_ame December 27 2010, 17:48:14 UTC

You cannot possibly have known that I have a small collection of o-mamori charms that I absolutely adore, so this story was SO ideal! ♥

Sweet and fluffy and very romantic. And it's how I often picture Byakuya wandering around in the Living World - intrigued by a few things, but careful not to show it too much, whereas Renji would be one giant walking ball of enthusiasm.

Now I want to know what book of poetry Renji purchased...

Two more things.

1) "he found himself cautious at not knowing the rules" - I love this characterization of rulebound Byakuya and how uncertain he is without the strictures of duty and expectation.
2) the thought of Byakuya all tangled up and confused in tape was beyond adorable

Thank you so much for taking the time to write this! I really enjoyed it. ♥

tylashke December 28 2010, 04:11:18 UTC

I'm so glad you liked it. ^^

As a matter of fact, my muse was pretty inspired, so this didn't take that long to write. On the other hand, I kept getting the feeling that Byakuya didn't feel that 'Byakuya-ish' when I was proofreading it... Not too sure why, but perhaps it seemed like Byakuya wasn't reacting with his usual cool, controlled manner. XD

As for the poetry, well I was thinking of Matsuo Bashou for one, because I remember reading his haiku in a correspondent's article. The same correspondent also had another article with poetry from a courtesan, whom I can't remember the name, nor find the article... so >.>

Thank you for reading and commenting~ ♥

ichibanseiken January 6 2011, 16:32:43 UTC

This was a very pleasant read. I'm taking notes on your paragraphing and idalogue, because it's clear and easy to read. (Unlike mine...sometimes).

About music - my impression of Byakuya indicates that he'd really enjoy a classical concert, whereas Renji would tend to fall asleep. FYI didya know that 30% of male attendees of concerts and ballets fall asleep in their seats? My husband got this tidbit from an usher while getting his 2nd coffee while trying to stay away during the Nutcracker :-) Anyway...did Bya have an opinionm, in your mind?

Thanks for writing.

tylashke January 7 2011, 08:05:41 UTC

XD I find my writing style somewhat too stiff and structured compared to other writers... Either way though, I'm still not totally satisfied with how my fics have turned out - they always seem to need more tweaking on hindsight - but I'm glad you find it a pleasant read. ^^

On the concert? Well, I'd expect Byakuya to find it interesting and perhaps a little extravagant/unnecessary, depending on how the pieces were rearranged for a symphonic orchestra. There is quite a difference between traditional Japanese music and Western symphonic music.

I would imagine Byakuya preferring music from the shamisen, koto or shakuhachi... and speaking of which, that gives me an idea... =P

Thank you for reading!