I really really enjoyed this. From Bob struggling to keep everyone at arms length, and not get hurt (again) to Mikey feeling okay being someone "for now" and not "forever" but still hoping for the "forever" bit (aww... Mikey).
And Gerard, both fiercely protective enough to punch Bob, and then turning around and worrying about hurting him.
I loved Frank and Jamia (or is that FranknJamia?) being generally awesome. I could have wished for a little more about Mikey and his background - we get only tantalizing hints that he's been burned before, relationship-wise, but no details.
And Ray trying to start a pre-school because it is needed. Mr. Bob and his reaction to his kids is pretty priceless.
So much to enjoy in this AU - I don't know what your original prompt was, but I love the way you treated this whole scenario. Good job!
Teensy tiny nit: "Just know, I, and the thankful for your support." ...this sentence when Ray is talking to the parents and guests is missing something... he sounds like he is babbling and not making much sense...
Initially this was going to be something very light-hearted and fluffy, but it didn't turn out that way at all.
It's a fair point about Mikey. I started this from Bob's POV only, which is why he tended to be more front and centre with his issues. You're right though, Mikey did get burned and as a result has his own problems, though he doesn't deal in the same way as Bob.
The scenes with Bob and his kids are what I built this story on, so I'm happy that they worked for you.
Thank you for such a lovely comment, and for the nit pick, I'd say Ray was supposed to babble but we all know it's just me messing up my editing :)
And Gerard, both fiercely protective enough to punch Bob, and then turning around and worrying about hurting him.
I loved Frank and Jamia (or is that FranknJamia?) being generally awesome. I could have wished for a little more about Mikey and his background - we get only tantalizing hints that he's been burned before, relationship-wise, but no details.
And Ray trying to start a pre-school because it is needed. Mr. Bob and his reaction to his kids is pretty priceless.
So much to enjoy in this AU - I don't know what your original prompt was, but I love the way you treated this whole scenario. Good job!
Teensy tiny nit: "Just know, I, and the thankful for your support." ...this sentence when Ray is talking to the parents and guests is missing something... he sounds like he is babbling and not making much sense...
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Initially this was going to be something very light-hearted and fluffy, but it didn't turn out that way at all.
It's a fair point about Mikey. I started this from Bob's POV only, which is why he tended to be more front and centre with his issues. You're right though, Mikey did get burned and as a result has his own problems, though he doesn't deal in the same way as Bob.
The scenes with Bob and his kids are what I built this story on, so I'm happy that they worked for you.
Thank you for such a lovely comment, and for the nit pick, I'd say Ray was supposed to babble but we all know it's just me messing up my editing :)
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