I liked it :o) And sorry you had to do some research to get my comment, but I wanted you to feel what I got from reading it and Noh was the best way to articulate that.
There were certainly "beats" defining what they needed to say, and as you now know Noh (say it 5 times fast!), you can feel this piece right?
I felt it before :-). but I think I understand what you are saying, and feeling - in the beginning, they very much were "dancing" around, and then with, each other (verbally and nonverbally), and there was a lot of tension between them - which begins to melt in the second half of the story. I feel like those two are always strung tight with each other, and the reason they can never relate properly is that they never address/resolve that tension - here, I tried to let them do that, so that they could move forward. It seems to me (again, I only now "know Noh" :-D the very tiniest fraction of a bit) that part of what makes Noh so effective is the interplay of contrasts, the tension concealed in the movements and song, the slow burn and then the break-through reveal, followed by the slow, fading resolution (my piece is not nearly as dramatic :-) - I think it begins in a similar way but the ending is softer, mellowing it out whereas Noh is dramatic all the way through. I'm not sure if that's a failure on my part or not, but that's how
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having just come back, with an understanding of the barest bones of the *basics* of Noh theater Thank you very much! That's the effect I was hoping for, I think-I wanted the reader to *feel* what Martha and the Doctor were experiencing for his or herself. I don't usually write in this style, actually, but I think I will try to do so more often.
and that's what it's going to be like tomorrow :o)
I really enjoyed the cadence mixed with the tension in the beginning of the piece. It reminded me of Noh theater.
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Thank you very much for the clear, detailed comment. I am very glad you enjoyed it.
runs off to learn more about Noh theater
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There were certainly "beats" defining what they needed to say, and as you now know Noh (say it 5 times fast!), you can feel this piece right?
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