Brigit's Flame Week 4: Tears of the Gods
Note on the Prompt: When I read the phrase "tears of the gods" I immediately thought of rain. This entry, then, includes rain, physically, figuratively, and symbolically.
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Wow.
First off, the imagery was beautiful and unobtrusive. I visualized everything with ease--something that rarely happens--and felt like I was walking through the setting myself.
Secondly, I felt connected with the character only a few lines in to the story, and this made the piece ten thousand times more sad to me. This character just made so much sense, I could understand her, I loved her, I felt terrible for her. She seems very self-aware... but perhaps a bit too terrified to admit it. Being that aware would mean admitting she's making a mistake, staying with her husband... and you proved at the end that she is unwilling to accept it, even when the truth is thrown in her face. Depressing as it may be, that's all too often what happens.
My favorite lines: "Even their dating had been hills and valleys of bitter words and attempts to smooth them over." This one line speaks volumes. Amazing.
"Now, lulling herself in the rocker, Annie remembers how that statement felt. It was like a light dawning, yet one too bright to look at." This is a very interesting take on the "epiphany/lightbulb turning on" notion. I really liked this, and it carries so much weight in this piece.
All in all, I loved this story. It is absolutely one of my favorites. My only criticism is this: try reading the first half or first quarter of the story aloud--I found myself stumbling a bit over the sentence structure, sometimes, and the last issue you want in such a wonderful, powerful story is for the flow to be interrupted.
Either way--I LOVED this. Excellent work. :)
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