drawn too close and gone in a flash
A SINGLE FRATBOY drives up to a stop light. At the same corner a group of four or so DRUNK PUNK-BANSHEES stand around talking.
Single fratboy: Fuck you!
Group of drunk punk-banshees: FUCK YOU!
Single fratboy: You fuckin' bitch!
Group of drunk punk-banshees: NO FUCK YOU! FUCK YOU! You fucker! Fuck you!
Single fratboy's car drives away as the light changes.
Group of drunk punk-banshees: Fucker! Fuck you! You fucking cumstain!
Silence, as the fratboy is gone.
Group of drunk punk-banshees: FUCK YOU!
The silence continues.
It is 2:30am. I'm not remotely asleep (and if I were, this wouldn't have woken me) so while others might find this troubling, I find it enthralling. You can't write dialogue this good.
Single fratboy: Fuck you!
Group of drunk punk-banshees: FUCK YOU!
Single fratboy: You fuckin' bitch!
Group of drunk punk-banshees: NO FUCK YOU! FUCK YOU! You fucker! Fuck you!
Single fratboy's car drives away as the light changes.
Group of drunk punk-banshees: Fucker! Fuck you! You fucking cumstain!
Silence, as the fratboy is gone.
Group of drunk punk-banshees: FUCK YOU!
The silence continues.
It is 2:30am. I'm not remotely asleep (and if I were, this wouldn't have woken me) so while others might find this troubling, I find it enthralling. You can't write dialogue this good.