[fic] Screw Destiny 3

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Disclaimer: I don't own a thing.

Rating: T for now.

Summary: Naruto hated bastards with the passion of a thousand suns. Too bad that his new partner is a combination of all that. NaruSasu, AU.

Comments

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I'm rather late in replying, but thanks for the awesome comment. I'm really glad you enjoy this.

I'm trying to go slow because I like building up tension. The fic would be rather pointless, if I developed things too quickly.

I'm really pleased you liked the conversation; it was fun and interesting to explore the Kiba-Naruto dynamics. I'm also glad that it was raw and full of emotion -- this is what I was going for.

You might update less often than I do, but I think your chapters are more polished and better written. I'm trying to be disciplined about updating because I would otherwise run in danger of not abandoning a project. Besides, writing helps me to calm down. I mostly write after studying, which might be counterproductive, but it works for me.

I fixed the typo. Thanks for pointing it out.

[duchess_pol]

Thank you for the update!
I think you've been already told many times that your characterization is awesome. I'd like to add that I really appreciated the way you made Kiba act as well. Not to mention that my beloved Shikamaru pops up so often!
Can't wait!

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Thank you for commenting. I'm glad that you're still reading this.

I'm glad you like my characterization of Kiba: it was my first time writing him. I can't help mentioning Shikamaru -- he's one of my favourite characters.

[m_buggie]

Another excellent chapter! Marvelous work.

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Thank you. I'm glad you're still enjoying this as well. It means a lot.

[elfinmouse]

I really liked that moment when Naruto wondered how he could know Sasuke's voice anywhere, even though he'd known him less than a week. It's interesting how you're evolving their relationship in these subtle ways.

It was also amusing how Naruto's thoughts referred twice to curiousity about how Sasuke would look if he smiled. It didn't have anything to do with any attraction, but it hints at a very strong interest and awareness toward Sasuke.

Naruto's reaction to Kiba's outburst, in my opinion, was very true to the character. Naruto always does seem to go very quiet in the face of emotional hurt, the fact that he immediately walked away here is a facinating clue about his characer.

I think it was actually one of the more interesting parts in the story plot-wise as well. You've hinted several times about Naruto's past, his family and at work, and that scene just seemed to highlight those murky, unanswered questions. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)

Sorry for not giving a better review, I'm a bit tired.

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I really like exploring their relationship like this; it's exciting and fun. I think Sasuke affects Naruto in a lot of ways and this what I tried to show here.

I'm glad you liked that part. I wanted to show Naruto being aware and interested without immediately hinting at attraction.

That part was hard to write, but I kept replaying some scenes from the manga. While I don't think that Naruto is introverted or emotionally distant, he does have this tendency to keep silent about his own pain. He wears his heart on his sleeve, but also doesn't wish others to his weakness. I'm not really good at explaining this, but I'm nevertheless glad that you liked this part.

I'm glad it struck you like that, although a part of me is nervous that I won't be able to answer the questions satisfactorily.

And please don't worry about the review. It's lovely.

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Thanks for pointing the mistakes out. Sometimes, I really wonder what the hell I'm thinking of when writing. Or whether I think at all. But I'm glad that the one typo amused you.