[fic] Screw Destiny 1

[transient_words]

Disclaimer: I don't own a thing.

Rating: T for now.

Summary: Naruto hated bastards with the passion of a thousand suns. Too bad that his new partner is a combination of all that. NaruSasu, AU.

Comments

[dayadhvam_triad]

So, worth continuing?
@_@. Need you ask that? Of course it's worth continuing! :)

Your characterization is wonderfully spot-on for all of them--even Sasuke, who's featured only a little so far. Naruto's personality is an awesome blend of irreverence and grumbling and humor and just--yes, it's lovely. :)

So far, Naruto considered him to be an asshole with a stick shoved up in his rear. Or, this was the result of not getting laid it enough.
*snort* Loved this. :D

“You're still doing it,” the good-looking, fuckwit remarked, his voice exasperated.I think there is an extra comma in the sentence there (and there are a few typos scattered throughout the fic), but considering your RL circumstances, it is nothing to worry about. :) Anyway, what I wanted to comment on--what stood out to me about this particular sentence was just how perfectly it captures Naruto. The juxtaposition of "good-looking" and "fuckwit" is so unexpected--and at the same time, I think, "Oh, only Naruto!" Praise in one word and insult in the next, and it describes

[transient_words]

I'm honestly relieved that you think I got their personalities down. That's something that has worried me recently -- being OOC.

I'll fix the extra comma (which once again I totally missed) and the other things, if I find them. I'm glad you liked that description of Sasuke...and thought that the line fitted Naruto.

I really like writing Sakura-Naruto, be it romantic or not. I think they're wonderfully in synch with each other and hoped to capture this here.

I don't get it either. There are different kinds of love, but it doesn't mean that a certain kind of love is better than the other.

[grindell107]

This is nice! It's definitely worth continuing.

[transient_words]

Thank you.

[sakanda]

Oooh, it is worth it! <3 I adore your Naruto's voice. <3 I WANT TO HEAR MORE. <3 xD

& not to mention your bastard!Sasuke. <3 Man, he's like on a whole different level. I love it.

Plus, hey, Cop!Naruto? Who doesn't love those?

& honestly. D: That would be such a mean place to leave us hanging. xD

gogogo for it~~

[transient_words]

Thank you. I'm so glad you adore my Naruto's voice and my characterization of bastard!Sasuke.

I'll go for it.

[senior_witch]

You were going to AWOL? Why that?

Anyway, I like your story and I hope you are going to continue it.

What made me think: Naruto behaves towards that stranger (whom we all know of course) in exactly the way he hates when he is on the other side.

I just thought about your experiences with trains, because actually I like going by train, but that is probably because I like reading and thus normally I can avoid having to talk to strangers.

[transient_words]

Because I should devote all of my time to studying (but, somehow, I can't stop being obsessed with Naruto and the fandom). Well, I still think I can manage. Hopefully.

I like going by train as well, but also know how uncomfortable it can be at times. I also avoid talking to strangers by reading.

[duchess_pol]

I would be very grateful if you do go on.

[transient_words]

I will. I definitely will.