Doctor Frankenstein couldn't save this rubbish.

[tosaiko]

With these two scenes being set five minutes apart, you'd think it would be an easy segue between them, but no. The last paragraph of the first  scene and the first paragraph of the second scene are completely irreconcilable. The second was originally the opening to the file and it shows, blatantly, because no matter what I do, it sounds out of place when the setting has already been built up. I don't want to delete the first scene, though, because it's the only part which makes a decent preview and doesn't crumble away into pretentious rambling, plus it explains where the character is more effectively.

Hello, by the way. I decided it would be a good idea to update my LiveJournal again, to spare me ranting in WordPad documents or under cuts on tumblr. I doubt I'll post again until next December, but it would be nice to have a safe place again.