Results post for Round One - Challenge One

[the_silver_sun]

WriterStoryPositive votesNegative votesFinal scoreAnalineblueThe Persistence of Memory      +2     -4   -2AngstosaurPiper at the Gates of Death      +7    -10   -3Chamilet-----Round skipped------                     ColebaltblueUntitled      +1     -6    -5Cookielaura-----Round skipped------FiresnapDead Things      +4      -2    +2Harkpad02Defying

Comments

[colebaltblue]

I found the feedback very helpful, if anyone has any more, please feel free to toss it my way. Positive or negative! You always have something to learn from constructive criticism is my opinion!

[fide_et_spe]

I'm sorry you got voted out. I didn't vote either way for your story, but I thought it was fine, it was just a little slice of life. Clearly I have no idea what the reasons for your negative votes would have been but the thing I would have picked up on was that the dialogue sort of hung there, I wasn't that sure about it, but I did like the ideas and the mood that you evoked with the music.

[colebaltblue]

Thanks for your feedback. I think when I was cutting to meet the word count I focused too much on NOT cutting dialogue and cutting the rest instead. It lost a lot of its cohesion, I think. It's great to hear your point though. Thanks again.

[colebaltblue]

Absolutely!

Hmmmm, was there something or somewhere in particular that I seemed to miss the boat when it came to taking it deeper. Like a point where I had an opportunity to move forward into something deeper but instead took a different tract? Is there something in particular that struck you as keeping the story shallow or something that struck you as an attempt to go deeper that failed?

Thanks so much for offering feedback, I really appreciate it!