At times, it feels like you're tagging almost entirely within the APH cast. You don't really seem to tag outside of it much. I realize that it's hard to tag outside a cast, but sometimes I feel as if you're just forcing interactions within the cast, even when it comes from countries that Italy normally doesn't have much interaction with (China, for example). I wish you would tag more outside the APH cast, because really, you do a very good take on an alternative Romano -- you can see the differences between him and her, but you don't tag outside much.
If it makes sense, I think you also have her accept the 'alternative universe' a bit too readily. Of course, most other people get the gist or at least flow along with it, but you have her readily handwaving things with 'oh that's how things are in my universe' to other nations. Maybe it wouldn't be so jarring if she prefaced it with more of an explanation, but it's just 'Oh I'm from an alternative universe'. You don't do that flippantly, but it just...doesn't seem natural, exactly.
I also think there needs to be more of a fluidity between mothering, gently Romana and BITCH I WILL FUCK YOU UP Romana. I understand she can shift from one to another very fast, but there needs to be a better balance of that in everyday life. You mention in her app she's judgmental, but all that seems to consist of is sassing back to nations who she...doesn't really know because they're not from her own 'verse. This ties back to the 'I'm from an alternative universe' thing -- she doesn't KNOW these male/female nations, she can hazard based on their counterparts but she doesn't really know them, so it seems kind of artificial that she's just...going at them like they're the nations she's used to.
I really do like your Romana, and I think that you've managed to make her a distinct character from Romano while managing to keep base with him. Part of the reason that I bring up the whole 'tagging outside APH' thing is that I really want to tag with her. I just...really can't find an opportunity, as while you make open posts they seem oddly insular.
Thank you for listening to my critique. I don't really mind if you unscreen mines or not.
Ah yes, I realise I've being this myself, and I've been mentally scolding myself too anon. A lot of it comes just from the fact that I have mostly the Heta cast on Plurk, and I'm using it to let me know when there's posts. Honestly I should be on a hiatus and not just trying to scramble to actually do things, because my life is in a bit of a crazy place with moving and starting school and getting a new job. However, I will be doing my best from now on to improve on my failures, and tag outside.
So, you'd like to see more of a difference between worlds, with Romana, if I understand correctly? AH I'm afraid to me she's rather blunt to most adults, and while she is quietly freaking out, she's too proud to let people know this. She has truly accepted this, she wants to find a way home obviously. I don't mean to handwave and I don't think I full understand this paragraph so may I have an example please?
I don't mean to completely making her relations with the canon Hetalia characters exactly the same as the ones from her verse. However her grudge for Germany is quite deep, it's not something she can let go, just because, 'Oh, you're a male Germany? Oh clearly I should start afresh with you' It's not who she is. I base a lot of my headcanon for her relationships with the Nyotalia countries off roleplayers I know, so sometimes there are a lot of similarities. But I think I see what you mean, and I'll try not to do that from now on. I guess in a way she's slowly become more sassy and bitchy, so I'll try and tone it down.
Ah really? I try and make all of my posts open ones... but hey, any suggestions that would make a post more open to your character? I don't wanna cut anyone out.
Thank you for your crit. And please, if you have any more, lemme know, kay?
If it makes sense, I think you also have her accept the 'alternative universe' a bit too readily. Of course, most other people get the gist or at least flow along with it, but you have her readily handwaving things with 'oh that's how things are in my universe' to other nations. Maybe it wouldn't be so jarring if she prefaced it with more of an explanation, but it's just 'Oh I'm from an alternative universe'. You don't do that flippantly, but it just...doesn't seem natural, exactly.
I also think there needs to be more of a fluidity between mothering, gently Romana and BITCH I WILL FUCK YOU UP Romana. I understand she can shift from one to another very fast, but there needs to be a better balance of that in everyday life. You mention in her app she's judgmental, but all that seems to consist of is sassing back to nations who she...doesn't really know because they're not from her own 'verse. This ties back to the 'I'm from an alternative universe' thing -- she doesn't KNOW these male/female nations, she can hazard based on their counterparts but she doesn't really know them, so it seems kind of artificial that she's just...going at them like they're the nations she's used to.
I really do like your Romana, and I think that you've managed to make her a distinct character from Romano while managing to keep base with him. Part of the reason that I bring up the whole 'tagging outside APH' thing is that I really want to tag with her. I just...really can't find an opportunity, as while you make open posts they seem oddly insular.
Thank you for listening to my critique. I don't really mind if you unscreen mines or not.
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So, you'd like to see more of a difference between worlds, with Romana, if I understand correctly? AH I'm afraid to me she's rather blunt to most adults, and while she is quietly freaking out, she's too proud to let people know this. She has truly accepted this, she wants to find a way home obviously. I don't mean to handwave and I don't think I full understand this paragraph so may I have an example please?
I don't mean to completely making her relations with the canon Hetalia characters exactly the same as the ones from her verse. However her grudge for Germany is quite deep, it's not something she can let go, just because, 'Oh, you're a male Germany? Oh clearly I should start afresh with you' It's not who she is. I base a lot of my headcanon for her relationships with the Nyotalia countries off roleplayers I know, so sometimes there are a lot of similarities. But I think I see what you mean, and I'll try not to do that from now on. I guess in a way she's slowly become more sassy and bitchy, so I'll try and tone it down.
Ah really? I try and make all of my posts open ones... but hey, any suggestions that would make a post more open to your character? I don't wanna cut anyone out.
Thank you for your crit. And please, if you have any more, lemme know, kay?
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