FIC - CAPTIVATION (13/?)

[relentlessfire]

TITLE: Captivation
AUTHOR: Rina
GENRE: Kidnap-fic. Angst. Hurt/Comfort. Twincest.
RATING: NC-17 (Controversial themes, abduction, psychological drama, some violence, semi-forced sex acts, slash, eventual incest. No rape)
PAIRINGS: Tom/Bill, Bill/OMC, Tom/OMC
SUMMARY: A terrified Bill is abducted by someone he believes to be a crazy, obsessed fan. Will

Comments

[kseenaa]

I am actually curious at both stories, so whateveryou wanna write, I'll read it.

I also like how Bill and Tom both instinctivly knows when to give each other space... and being able to do so even in such a closed off area. Without any one of them being pissed at the other. Moving around each other in orbit, sorta. :-) You wrote that very well. My favorite part of this chapter. Koji is a weirdo, really... But not an evil one. Well, not totally. :-P I'd throw him to a shrink if he gets caught (big if) but that might just be me. :-)

[relentlessfire]

Well, I will write a bit about Koji and then a bit about Bill & Tom to keep everyone happy! (which is hard to do but I try)

I'm glad you liked that part of the chapter with the twins orbiting around each other like little planets. ^^ Thank you!

I wouldn't call Koji evil, either. He is a bit of a weirdo but I guess he has reasons for that. He'd be perfectly sane if his twin hadn't died in front of him. Maybe Bill can convince him to get help?

Thanks as always for reading, kseenaa!

[myr_juhl]

Koji's story is very interesting. Any material to justify what he's trying to accomplish with the twins is good stuff :)

So the moment of truth :) Of course we knew already, but now Bill knows, too. That he wants Tom to do things to him. It must be a conflict for him because one thing is that he actually wants to do stuff with Tom, but also that they have to do it in order to get out. That must mess with him big time. He's very affected by Tom's little break down - they both are, but they'll bounce back. They have to. One thing is the journey they're heading towards, but what about afterwards? Will they be able to cope with this on their own? So far, I'm not really concerned about those issues. It depends on how the progress goes :)

Koji is also reflecting about what he did yesterday and man, he's a little far out when he's compromising his own principles when he begins to offer more sex consultation :)

It's really great. I love it :)

[relentlessfire]

I'm so happy that you're into Koji's story. I find damaged souls like him quite fascinating, myself, and I also think somebody like him can be redeemed. If they want to be... But he seems to be breaking a new rule every day where Bill is concerned! That boy is affecting him more than Koji wants him to

[myr_juhl]

No offense, but I'm getting a little inpatient waiting for the next chapter :( just because this story is sooo good and I wanna hear more about his Koji and his brother...(:

[snowstormskies]

I liked this chapter because it dealt with some more... meaty issues, I felt. I especially like Bill's confidence, and his little spat with Tom because it showed that Bill is growing up, and knows that Tom doesn't have all the control he wants to. I love how you explore character depth in this story - it's just... mmm. So well done you can hardly see it but it's so strong.

But. Personally, I'd like to shove Bill and Tom onwards a bit - force them to move a little more. Maybe you can weave Koji's backstory in around it or maybe you just want to play with it but I would like to see some more happening between the two of them. I feel like the story is beginning to focus on Koji through Koji's eyes... >.> That sounds utterly ridiculous and I feel dumb for saying it now. I think that if you played Bill and Tom a little more, you could use that to reflect back on Koji, rather than justing shining a spotlight on Koji's past.

[relentlessfire]

Hey, thanks so much for all your comments! I've taken everything you said on board and there will definitely be more stuff happening between Bill & Tom very soon, even if Koji has to force it. I'll tell a little bit of Koji's past because some readers are curious but I'll focus more on the boys and the changes they're going through, as seen through his perspective.

I'm glad you're enjoying it!

[snowstormskies]

Ha, I'm glad I didn't come across as too horrible. I kept re-reading my comment and going, "Am I being too bitchy? Am I being too mean about a story that isn't my own?"

I would love you hear some of Koji's background - he is such an interesting bad guy - but I would also like to see some change between Bill and Tom too. My twincest levels are getting a little low :P

You write wonderfully, and I'm absolutely certain that you'll do what's right for the story, but that's what I think :D

[ura_hd]

I just found this story. It is fascinating! I think you are a very good psychologist. The behavior of all parties involved makes a lot of sense. I hope that this experience will not break the twins, but will make them stronger.

[relentlessfire]

Hey, thanks so much! I'm hardly a psychologist but I do like my characters' actions to be believable so I think about it a lot! Koji's aim is to make the twins stronger in their bond so we shall soon see if he has succeeded. I'm happy you're enjoying the story and where it's going :) Thank you again.

[videocrash]

Ok, no chances with Koji even if you brought him in person to my door, not with Bill around loool

[relentlessfire]

Thank you so much for all your comments on this chapter! I find the psychological aspects of a character intriguing too and believe that most people are much more complex than they appear. I guess I'm keeping Bill a bit of a mystery too, huh? ;)

Tom does need to change his way of thinking or he'll get nowhere in this situation. But he finds it hard to let go of his angry protectiveness! If he's not the man, then who is he??

Mm, who wouldn't wanna explore Koji's body? XDD Sex can definitely ruin a chapter so I chose not to go there. I think it's more interesting that way!

You're totally right about Koji, in all respects. He values respect and kindness. He also wants Bill, but doesn't want to betray his brother, yet he longs for and misses affection and physical touch which he is starting to get from Bill which only makes him want it even more. Where will it lead? Will anything ever happen between them? Keep on reading and see!

Thanks again. Hope you like the next part :)