Draft of an essay for a campus feminist review

[to_cry_about]

1000 words, and needs tightening. I'm interested in hearing thoughts, especially from people who aren't religious in the slightest and think the Church is too homophobic and misogynist to be saved -- am I strawmanning your side too much? Does my perspective make sense or do I come off like a raving loony? Is this a satisfying answer to the

Comments

[suckingalemon]

i am religious in a jewish sense and while i think the church is hella homophobic i am an optomistic person and beleive improvements can be reached - but i think it will be done from the outside, rather than from the inside. & when i read about good kind hearted people in the church (whereever they are)i sometimes forget about not everything being awesome (your first sentence).

i like what you are saying as a spectator myself because you are not being a hateful liberal bashing everything and on the other hand you're not acting scared and going over to the conservative side.
and i don't find it biased as you're able to find the beauty in the church amongst all the ugly - the reasons why the true embrace their religion.

noone should ever push anyone away from what they want to do.
at the same time you have to live with it and you have to be ok with it.

i hope this comes out properly, but your article reminds me of one of those movies that at the end it does not solve anything/offer solutions but it acts as a reminder that everything is ok and not all is as bad as it seems, and i think hope as an alternative option is sometimes all we need.

cheers