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tmelange August 16 2006, 17:31:37 UTC
I'm very glad you like it. I was afraid this story was a little boring because it's part of a bigger universe, but it is what it is. At least it's entertaining. ;)

Thanks for reading and commenting!

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vipers_in_love August 16 2006, 21:13:16 UTC
Noooo! You can't leave it there! I was so hoping I'd be wrong and they'd be together, but you stuck a knife in me. :D ( ... )

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tmelange August 17 2006, 00:15:20 UTC
Thank you! I'm *so* glad you liked the story and didn't mind too much that the ultimate ending is still not clear. This is only one story in a whole universe that I'm creating around this timeline so they'll be more stories to pick up on all the hanging threads.

Thanks again. Your extremely kind words make me want to rush and finish a new story, which is always a great feeling. :)

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damos August 16 2006, 22:36:52 UTC
Alfred, who had betrayed him
I just wanted to pause for a second and ponder the delicious possibilities and universes opened up by that one little clause.

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tmelange August 17 2006, 00:28:36 UTC
Bwahaha. :) You're the only one who noticed it so far ( or at least has bothered to say anything about it). I really want to do something significant with Alfred. I'd like to play on the fact that at one point, Alfred had his own comic. Plus, I think he's entirely too supportive of Bruce's craziness...

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damos August 17 2006, 00:46:33 UTC
Alfred is the most super-powered figure in the DCU. And he does get far too little credit in keeping Bruce in line.

He had his own comic book... hrm... this requires greater investigation.

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tmelange August 17 2006, 01:03:52 UTC
Let me know if you find anything. I read about this somewhere, and now that I want to use it I can't remember where...

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jij August 16 2006, 23:22:38 UTC
In the end, he is told everything and asked to promise only one thing: that he will find some measure of joy in his life despite the pain.

*dances* This is great, just great, perfect, wonderful. I love this dream, with the constrast between the black and white and the blue, all the foreshadowing and import.

When will you learn? He is mine. Always.

Yep. I love the certitude of this part, the feeling that from the past echoing forward everything clicks inevitably into place, try as Clark or Bruce or anyone else might to keep it from happening sometimes. And I love the wry and defiant mix of "When will you learn?" as well.

Like I said in my pep talk to vipers_in_love in part 1 (it was hardly a comment, I just broke out the pompoms, lol), this story works so wonderfully moving backward in time and forward in confidence...but then the confidence echoes forward again to past the beginning of the story, into the future's future that we haven't seen yet. It's like a ripple that goes backward and hits a wall, and somehow that turns it into a wave ( ... )

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tmelange August 17 2006, 00:51:35 UTC
>>(it was hardly a comment, I just broke out the pompoms, lol),

I'm glad you did. :)

You managed to get everything I ever intended this story to be, Jen. That is *so* cool. :)

:hugs:

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tmelange August 17 2006, 00:54:57 UTC
Sasha, you're killing me with the "I don't write" thing. I write a lot. :) Really, I do. :) You just don't appreciate me. LOL

Thanks so much for your comments. I decided to make my own universe :) so there will definitely be more of this story coming soon. And it *will* all end happily...one day. :)

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tmelange August 17 2006, 15:26:09 UTC
Thank you. I feel like criminal mastermind bwahahaha!

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