I didn't see this Prelude, so I read Part I first. So they don't end up together?
This is definitely a case of a story that really, really has to be read in order, even though the three parts don't look literally connected. We go from the loss of part 1 to the hope of part 2 to the certainty of part 3...do the order differently and you'll throw off the feeling of the progression. But how can you read the last paragraph of part 3 and not know Clark can't marry Lois? *claps VIL on the shoulder* Buck up, chum! Also, note that this future...has a future that someone is looking back from.
As a side note: only Theresa could pull off a "prelude" set in the "distant future," lol.
I'm so glad I didn't have to wait for this! Um...um...can't find favorite lines, they're all so good...hold on...
He can't help the bitterness that edges his words. "No one is as careful as you."
The way the whole world becomes more tolerable, infinitely more pleasing, when their lips meet.That's so Bruce. So understated and yet such a strong statement
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You're absolutely right, of course. But still, I want to see the getting-back-together part. I insist! LOL. Otherwise I'll be obsessing over how Bruce pulls it off, whether he wins Clark back before Clark actually ties the knot, how long it takes, and so on.
But, never mind, I'll just suffer in silence. :D It's a small price to pay for such a well-written, memorable story.
The good thing about this universe is that I set it up so that i can write anywhere along the timeline at any point. I plan to do two more stories set in the beginning and then jump to a few from the middle and end. I'll likely get to the Lois thing sooner rather than later. Plus, doesn't Superman die in the comics before he gets to marry Lois... ;)
this is the day some future observer will point to as proof that certain souls are tethered, one to the other, by an ethereal, gossamer thread which draws them together inexorably, like the rush of the river to the sea. That despite the past, in dereliction of memory, with no regard for future hopes and dreams, in spite of any and all obstacles-certain souls are linked by a bond that cannot and should not be broken.
As I had the pleasure of beta reading this story, you already have most of my feedback, but I don't think I complimented this line--and I should have. I love the imagery here. The rush of images, actually. And the idea that the bond itself is fraught--deny it at your own risk, Bruce (and Clark).
Damn, Bruce! Behave!!! how come only I have the sane Bruce who's not being an ass?? and I'm slow and write nothing! Damn you Bruce!! Be good! arggggggg
I get to start this story knowing he blew it? Theresa! You want me to cry, don't you? Good thing I read the comments, I'm glad they are going to fix their messy relationship! but still. Bruce being difficult and losing Clark ;.;
Don't say it never meant anything.
That's... such stupidly Bruce. He so does that. Never tells people he cares, and then is all sad because people don't know he does. Argg! Poor Clark. Still, one thing is being mad/angry at Bruce and another is marrying Lois... c'mon, Clark! no need to go to the extremes!
This is very poetic, I love the imagery and the feeling of 'ending' this has. I'm glad it's also a new beggining. I'm off to read the next one... loved it, but it's making me heart bleed! /me reaches for the band aids
Thanks, Mina! I have to stop writing Bruce as such an ass all the time -- but I think he is. :) He's so *mean* to everyone. My brother is like that, mean all the time. I hate it. I like people to be happy and nice... ;)
As for this part -- doesn't it say that it's the end of the beginning? That means that they're relationship will keep evolving, and it will *never* be over. Now, they get to work together in with the JLA, and close proximity breeds opportunity... ;)
I know Bruce is an ass... most of the time. One of my friends is very much like him, and it took me several years to work into his comfort zone. Now I do whatever I want with him and he has to put up with it because I put up with him when he was being an ass :P I guess I see Bruce like that...
'End of the beggining' is still an end, and seeing Clark hurt... it made my heart bleed. Bruce can be such an ass, you write a great stupid Bruce, that's why it hurts! he's true to himself. It's something he would surely do. Don't get me wrong, it made me sad, but I LOVED this. Each piece is special and different and ot me through a different set of emotions. That's great writing.
Thank you. :) I'm not quite happy with this story for some reason. Maybe it's because it's hard to write a bad Clark. I'll probably end up re-writing this section, though perhaps not until this weekend. In any event, thanks so much for reading!
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This is definitely a case of a story that really, really has to be read in order, even though the three parts don't look literally connected. We go from the loss of part 1 to the hope of part 2 to the certainty of part 3...do the order differently and you'll throw off the feeling of the progression. But how can you read the last paragraph of part 3 and not know Clark can't marry Lois? *claps VIL on the shoulder* Buck up, chum! Also, note that this future...has a future that someone is looking back from.
As a side note: only Theresa could pull off a "prelude" set in the "distant future," lol.
I'm so glad I didn't have to wait for this! Um...um...can't find favorite lines, they're all so good...hold on...
He can't help the bitterness that edges his words. "No one is as careful as you."
The way the whole world becomes more tolerable, infinitely more pleasing, when their lips meet.That's so Bruce. So understated and yet such a strong statement ( ... )
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But, never mind, I'll just suffer in silence. :D It's a small price to pay for such a well-written, memorable story.
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As I had the pleasure of beta reading this story, you already have most of my feedback, but I don't think I complimented this line--and I should have. I love the imagery here. The rush of images, actually. And the idea that the bond itself is fraught--deny it at your own risk, Bruce (and Clark).
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Damn, Bruce! Behave!!! how come only I have the sane Bruce who's not being an ass?? and I'm slow and write nothing! Damn you Bruce!! Be good! arggggggg
I get to start this story knowing he blew it? Theresa! You want me to cry, don't you? Good thing I read the comments, I'm glad they are going to fix their messy relationship! but still. Bruce being difficult and losing Clark ;.;
Don't say it never meant anything.
That's... such stupidly Bruce. He so does that. Never tells people he cares, and then is all sad because people don't know he does. Argg! Poor Clark. Still, one thing is being mad/angry at Bruce and another is marrying Lois... c'mon, Clark! no need to go to the extremes!
This is very poetic, I love the imagery and the feeling of 'ending' this has. I'm glad it's also a new beggining. I'm off to read the next one... loved it, but it's making me heart bleed! /me reaches for the band aids
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As for this part -- doesn't it say that it's the end of the beginning? That means that they're relationship will keep evolving, and it will *never* be over. Now, they get to work together in with the JLA, and close proximity breeds opportunity... ;)
Thanks again for your wonderful comments!
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'End of the beggining' is still an end, and seeing Clark hurt... it made my heart bleed. Bruce can be such an ass, you write a great stupid Bruce, that's why it hurts! he's true to himself. It's something he would surely do. Don't get me wrong, it made me sad, but I LOVED this. Each piece is special and different and ot me through a different set of emotions. That's great writing.
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You handle scenery/descriptions very well.
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