Comments | tkel_paris: FIC: Thou Wilt Quake For This (5/9)

tkel_paris

FIC: Thou Wilt Quake For This (5/9)

Oct 20, 2014 21:19

Title: Thou Wilt Quake For This
Genre: Much Ado About Nothing
Rating: T (except for the DVD extra)
Author: tkel_paris
Summary: Benedick and Beatrice have found themselves forced to marry. While their family and friends are determined to make them fall in love, a chance emerges to expose the villains who trapped them. Can they succeed and protect Hero?
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rating = t, fanfic, sykira, challenge, shakespeare, maan, fic!presents

Comments 14

ginie59 October 22 2014, 02:36:39 UTC

yes, finally someone listen to poor bruno now benedick and beatrice knows of the plot but call me paranoid but i think that will not be as simple as plain.

and oh my god they says their love to each other it's about time now i'm impatient for the next chapter.

tkel_paris October 22 2014, 03:57:55 UTC

It must be a good chapter if I've rendered you half speechless. :) Well, wait and see. It'll be rough, I'll tell you that much.

Yes, about time they admitted it, right? I'll be posting within a day or so. (I need to get ready for bed - early class to teach tomorrow.) Again, thank you so much for the warm words.

inward_audacity October 22 2014, 11:49:38 UTC

I feel your pain, Bruno. It's hard to be young and have no one listen to you. I cannot wait for Beatrice to kick the troublemakers' asses. Benedick will hurt them but she will probably destroy them. She's my hero.

I love that you added that little bit where she can't help but stroke his clean shaven cheeks before stepping away. It's adorable and really sweet.

tkel_paris October 22 2014, 18:38:45 UTC

Worse when you're a servant. :/ Yeah, she is awesome and CT made her even more so.

Couldn't resist. :D

cannibalilly October 23 2014, 18:19:39 UTC

Once again a nice example of how adults dismiss children... or maybe how rich people dismiss servants? Maybe both, but eventually Bruno made it!

You did a great job in explaining their feelings to the given (and added) dialogues, especially Bruno's! (Yes, yes, I've grown very fond of him ;P) I just love that you gave him a more important part to play in this.

tkel_paris October 23 2014, 18:49:30 UTC

Thank you! He deserved it, and got the recognition from them.

And I take you loved the dialogue between Ben and Bea? :DDDDD

sykira October 25 2014, 17:03:26 UTC

Oh my word! You probably heard my squeeing clear across the country! This was SUCH A GORGEOUS way to have them declare their feelings, and for me at least, completely unexpected. I confess I thought your idea from the start was to send them to the altar still not knowing the truth of their feelings for each other, I'm not sure why because in retrospect that wasn't a logical assumption on my part, but it made the surprises in this chapter all the sweeter :D

I LOVED her blushes! I LOVEDLOVED his chivalrous concern for a chaperone and appearances, even though they were already fake-disgraced, oh such honor, I just adore Benedick!

And his approaching then not pursuing when she backs off, it's beautiful, it's BETTER than the director's choices in the play sometimes, because it show's how respectful Benedick is of her feelings even more than propriety, not that Benedick in the play isn't ridiculously respectful of both but just…this was blissful.

tkel_paris October 25 2014, 19:02:43 UTC

Oh, so that's woke me from my troubled sleep. ;) If I weren't so sick I'd be jumping up and down over how excited you are. :D

As I said, may you have lovely Benedick-flavored dreams from this. ;D

You mean his stopping immediately when she backs off? Well, she just put the bench inbetween them. He can't miss that meaning here. Not where there's hardly anything for her to step behind. Hmm... I never tried to think about the motivation behind Benedick's coming closer until she deliberately placed three chairs between them. I'll have to think about that.

Chapter 8 is about to come up. :DDDD

sykira October 25 2014, 19:30:18 UTC

*cue another Saturday in which Sykira deconstructs MAAN til the cows come home ( ... )

sykira October 25 2014, 20:03:06 UTC

I wanted to hit post before I got interrupted, but actually the bench wasn't even what I was meaning by "his approaching then not pursuing when she backs off, it's beautiful" so much as the bolded part below, but I'll include all the "stage directions" I especially love:

Benedick wished to take Beatrice's hand in support, but it was perhaps too soon.
…
Beatrice sighed and made to get up. Now alone with him, she felt a need to depart. ...

“Please stay a moment more, Lady Beatrice,” Benedick begged.
...
He rested his hands on the bench, away from hers
...
She leaned in, love how he lets her choose to lessen the distance

He leaned closer, keeping about a foot between their heads.
…
He was at her side, holding her gently by the arms in an instant. “Then do it with all thy heart ( ... )

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