Comments | tkel_paris: FIC: Glance of Love (5/11) - A Much Ado About Nothing fanfic

tkel_paris

FIC: Glance of Love (5/11) - A Much Ado About Nothing fanfic

Sep 10, 2012 21:53

Title: Glance of Love
Genre: Much Ado About Nothing (2011 performance)
Rating: T (with two chapters rated M - one for paranoia, the other with... more cause)
Pairings: Bendick/Beatrice, Claudio/Hero
Summary: One chance look shared on the night before the ill-fated wedding day drew a pair of dueling lovers together... a bit earlier. Thus altering the ( Read more... )

rating = t, picspam, rating = m, fanfic, sykira, maan, birthdays

Comments 4

sykira September 13 2012, 02:01:48 UTC

*squeals*

You so have Benedick's slightly stiff proprietary manner and his proper-ness pitch perfect! I ADORE how protective he is :D I also have a sequence where he makes sure she gets home okay that night ♥ but yours has more touching so I think I like it better!

And the way you bring us back to the theme of the male imposing his will - you don't shy away from it with your Benedick but instead you make the point that he's not trying to be aggressive or anything, it's just his culture. I love how everything between is pivoting on that issue, it feels very true to the characters.

And KISSAGE! YES! I so hope we see some of Bea's internal reaction to that and if it is new for her -- that's something I tossed around with another MAAN writer, is she new to physical intimacy entirely? Can we presume Benedick is not? Interesting themes to delve into!

tkel_paris September 13 2012, 02:25:02 UTC

Oh, don't you dare remove yours! Not one line! I will say that without knowing what you have in mind. I bet yours is sweet, too. *hugs*

Yeah, the club scene is all about that, isn't it? In one way or another. :( BTW, how did I do in showing the scene given that I had no screencaps for it?

I knew you'd like that part. Hmm... Will double-check what I wrote for Chapters 7 and 10. ;D

sykira September 14 2012, 10:53:24 UTC

I do adore the screen caps but for me who has practically every Ben/Bea glance memorized, your writing is just as strong with or without the screen caps. You should post a link to this to the much ado 2011 LJ comm, to get more commenters maybe? If for some reason you don't want the tumblr crowd?

tkel_paris September 14 2012, 14:40:58 UTC

Well, I guess the caps are for those who HAVEN'T seen the play. (That included two of my betas. :() Um... where are the links? I'm not on tumblr, so... *shrugs* BTW, I got a kinda funny review on the story over at FF.N - if you wanna see the two reviews I've gotten so far. :)