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serenityslady May 9 2012, 16:32:16 UTC
Okay. I had to read this a second time before I commented (it was really late last night!). And I took notes. ;D

I got such a giggle out of the tussle. I am one of six kids, so I understand this phenomenon completely!

I have always had the feeling that the Doctor has a boatload of money squirreled away in dozens of Earth banks. Never mind Nine's assertion that he had none. I just think he was too lazy and forgetful to carry any! About time he did something with it!

I love their names. There is nothing else you can call Ten2. And Bella Asteria sounds like something I'd name a daughter if I had had one.

Noises. Guh! "Shields? We don't need no stinking shields!" Oh, the trauma to such tender youth! (snicker) And the TARDIS being tolerant of their *ehem* messiness. Although, "After the Doctor had cleaned the Jump Seat. Bipedal beings had no idea the messes they left behind" has to be one of the funniest lines I've read. :D

LOVED the idea of using 7's umbrella (and the fact it didn't work)! Brilliant!

Ah. Another Time Lord. Jenny possibly? Someone else? You know, there had to be some Time Lords living off planet during the War. It's an idea I've been mulling about with for a while. Hmmm.

As usual, excellent work.

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 16:56:39 UTC
A long review! I feel so loved! :D

There were a lot of lines I was very proud of in this chapter. Some I can't take total credit for, as my beta readers were very helpful with ideas. ;D Although I'm still waiting for people to notice something within the chapter... Nope, no hints! :)

You mean, other than the Master? Yeah. One could see that happening. You'll see.

Again, thanks! :D

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 17:06:44 UTC
Hmmm. Now you have me intrigued. This caught my eye:

"She couldn't explain the things she was sensing, and she wasn't in a mood to look carefully at it. She might check later with her husband."

And the Doctor's mention of previous tussles....could he have been a twin?

BTW, what is that video you alluded to in your intro? I'm clueless, as usual!

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 17:14:48 UTC
Donna hasn't yet figured out that at the moment, it's not just her husband's thoughts and feelings she can hear/sense. Although the twins do have some shielding already up, and the bond is different.

Well, who knows what kind of trouble he got into back when the Master was his friend? :)

Not a video. A photo. A very interesting photo... ;D

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 17:26:29 UTC
One can only imagine. And I think we all have at one time or another! ;D

Where can one locate said photo???

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 17:29:19 UTC
Well, go back to my Chapter Note. Have you figured out yet which line it was so that you might know what was in - or not in - said photo? ;D

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 17:37:43 UTC
Okay. You make a refered to theatre being for nakedness. And the twin:

“Really,” Bella added, “it's hardly the worst thing in the world! I mean, think about the theatre!”

Ben nodded, grimacing. “Yeah! After all, you might be seeing a total stranger starkers!”

So I suppose it's naked theatre. Tried to Google Estrogen Brigade and came up will all manner of things (including Leonard Nimoy!)

You are such a tease!!

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 17:52:36 UTC
Well, I'm trying to make you think! :P

Estrogen Brigade is a term used for the female fan base of any particular actor. It was used a lot during the 90s, as far as I can tell. As least in the States.

LEONARD NIMOY?! Please tell me it was a young him at least! :O

Here's a hint. What was the most pointed comment in this chapter regarding naked theatre moments? ;D

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 17:57:11 UTC
Ah. I get it now. And I even remember that term, now that you put it out there so plainly!

I didn't even click on the Nimoy link! Too scared.

Brother and sister seeing each other naked. Or seeing a total stranger starkers. Now I'm asking myself if I want to know!! :D

Hey, if I wanted to think, I'd go back to doing what I'm supposed to be doing at work!

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 18:00:16 UTC
I had to laugh during the 90s. A few of them, I just thought they were crazy. Guess I didn't see the appeal of the particular guy.

Don't blame you! *shudders*

Just...reread it a few times. You were getting warm with the lines you quoted earlier...

Heck, I'm trying to complete one of my story-a-day stories right now! :)

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 18:04:23 UTC
Okay. I'll leave you alone. At least for now!

Happy writing!

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serenityslady May 9 2012, 22:13:06 UTC
IN A BOBBY'S HAT?!?!?!?!?!?

HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

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tkel_paris May 9 2012, 23:38:24 UTC
*double-checks copy on hard drive* Right in one!

*cackles* Great one, isn't it? ;D

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serenityslady May 10 2012, 01:02:15 UTC
For god's sake! Someone get that boy a sandwich!!! At least he's filled out a bit since then. And the rest is fairly respectable, from what I can tell. :O

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tkel_paris May 10 2012, 01:45:01 UTC
*snickerfit* But what a sight! ;D

If you think that was skinny, imagine what Ben looked like when he was born. :P

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serenityslady May 10 2012, 01:48:04 UTC
That sight is now safely secured on my laptop hard drive, thank you very much! (giggle)

Oh. Hmmm. I'm a pervy old lady but I'm not sure I want to think about naked 14 year old boys! :D

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