So I'm some sort of writing god...
Or so they tell me.
Just came back from my workshop over my story (see previous entry for story).
First words: "Damn this guy can write!" followed by murmers of agreement.
That felt good. ( But the euphoria is starting to wear off. )
1. The fact that you say "maybe" and "guess" is indicative of the weakness of her character =p I know what I intended and it's not there. And as I'm very much anti-auteur explaining her character would be detrimental, in my opinion.
2. How so? He's not even in the scene? Perhaps as support for it in the bar scene, which should probably be lengthened.
3. True, you have a point. And having Jason the boss would undercut the tension Nathan feels for being late to work. But by eliminating Richard, it serves to tighten the characterization and give focus to the important characters. As it is, his character is a touch "throw-away." If I keep him in, I need to flesh him out more and give him screen time with Nathan.
4/5/9/10. I feel that having any sort of flashback or memory scene would undercut the tension the reader feels because of the sympathy for Nathan. Nathan tries to refuse to see the reality of the situation, and by keeping the time unceasing and in the "present" it helps to build that tension. Nathan doesn't have an escape or an outlet for his tension, so neither should the reader.
6. When I edit my work, I have a hard time getting back into the "flow" of the original. Sometimes that leads to tense confusion.
7. One of the readers at the workshop. Granted she's not very defined (and shouldn't be if she's to remain the symbol I want her to), but I suppose making her a little more concrete is in order.
8. Remember it's Nathan speaking at that moment. He wouldn't use "ninth grade"... sounds immature (regardless of the reality of freshman year).
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