[fanfic] 30 First Kisses - Kiss #19

[tiptoe39]

Title: 30 First Kisses - Kiss #19
Author: tiptoe39
Rating: PG for brief language
Summary: Apologies to any Republican readers I may have out there. Spoilers through 2x11.

This is the 19th of 30 possible ways Matt and Mohinder could share their first kiss, written for the 30_kisses challenge. The theme was "red" (aka). Previous kisses are here.

Comments

[kleenexcow]

I have tears in my eyes. This is an absolutely amazing piece of work. Worth waiting all day for because I'm fairly certain that this is my favorite piece of fic that's been posted in this community. I like it even more than I liked Kiss #17, which I hadn't expected could happen.

Your characterization--amazing. I was so pleased by the way that you portrayed not just M3 but also Bob and Micah and Monica and Peter and everyone else. You've created this gritty post-Powerless world where everything seems so much more real because the world is spinning faster and everything is at stake. And love blossoming out of angst? Nothing more beautiful.

And the fact that it's plot-driven? Wow. Just...WOW. And what a good running use of your theme throughout!

Peter as the little matchmaker? HILARIOUS. Awesome. Even better that Matt was so jealous.

Time to pull some quotes!
Peter gave it a good look, and it paused in midair and then gently splashed into the water below.
A nice moment.

Micah was the sort of kid you expected to be the class clown in better circumstances. Even now, he kept up with the conversation, shakily dropping jokes in when he could. But the effort he was expending to keep from crying was slowly breaking Matt inside.
Heartbreaking. And perfectly describes your tone set, too. I think in some ways that this is how all of your characters feel.

"Sorry, I don't have any answers for you," he said softly when the first kiss had ended.
"I don't need answers," Mohinder breathed, leaning in to kiss him again.
An amazing ending. It was poetic and deep and striking AND it referred back to earlier in the story, to boot. I don't know what your other four ways from Sunday were, but this one honestly and truly WORKED.

I <3 the in-jokes. The apron reference? Classic. And "Think? I think you ought to do voiceovers."? ZOMG. *dies.*

P.S.S.: "No, I'm not jealous!" Mohinder burst out. "So what did you write? Let me see." Is it supposed to read "Matt burst out."?

Well, now...back to my own post-Powerless fic. It seems to be the cool kid thing to do lately.

[tiptoe39]

AH, thanks for the typo correction! I was staying up so late correcting typos because this took me so long to write, my husband was basically yelling at me to go to bed. Will fix.