Oh my goodness, this is beautiful. Your prose throughout the story is just gorgeous -- you do an amazing job of balancing a clear and distinct voice for Gabriel that feels right and carries through from when he's an archangel in Heaven to the end. And it's also just haunting and lyrical and pitch perfect in its own right; there are so many phrases and places in here where the language seems to restrain itself in just right the moments, to get the full impact of the thought and then launches back into this graceful constructions. I'm not sure how much sense I'm making right now, but yes, really spectacular writing.
The way you handle all of Gabriel's relationships is great. From the very beginning with the grace merging (I'm so jealous of that idea, by the way) and his love and adoration for Lucifer, the constant reminder that he is God's favorite but without any jealousy from Gabriel was really well done. And it was interesting to see their relationship so close and while the pairing sort of scared me, on the header, you wrote it in such a way that I was close to crying when Lucifer rebelled and what that did to Gabriel. And then his relationship with the gods -- I was curious if and how you were going to work in Loki's children and you used them sparingly but perfectly. Linking them back to the Nephalim and the Grigori just about broke my heart. And Castiel. Of course it was Castiel. I, yes, I'm babbling now but this was flawless and wonderful the entire way through.
Thank you so much for the amazingly nice things you're saying. :) Honestly, I was quite worried at times that there would be too much of a discrepancy between the Gabriel at the end of the story and Gabriel in Heaven.
I always knew that the Lucifer pairing would probably not pull in droves of readers. And I kind of feel like it's a bit misleading up there in the header, and I half want to stick in some long explanation next to it how mostly that's not what it's about, really. When I first thought of the idea for this, it wasn't even supposed be Lucifer/Gabriel, but then I started actually writing and I was about two sentences in when I realised that that's what it is. Loki's children were something I felt like I couldn't just leave out, and I debated writing more about them, because as it stands now, I think if you don't have some idea about Norse mythology, you're going to be a bit lost (but I decided to assume that not many people who don't know at least something about Loki would be all that likely to read this anyway).
(Oh, I noticed you posted your bigbang. I'm looking forward to seeing how it turned out. As soon as I actually find enough time to sit down and read it, which seems to be a bit hard right now.)
The way you handle all of Gabriel's relationships is great. From the very beginning with the grace merging (I'm so jealous of that idea, by the way) and his love and adoration for Lucifer, the constant reminder that he is God's favorite but without any jealousy from Gabriel was really well done. And it was interesting to see their relationship so close and while the pairing sort of scared me, on the header, you wrote it in such a way that I was close to crying when Lucifer rebelled and what that did to Gabriel. And then his relationship with the gods -- I was curious if and how you were going to work in Loki's children and you used them sparingly but perfectly. Linking them back to the Nephalim and the Grigori just about broke my heart. And Castiel. Of course it was Castiel. I, yes, I'm babbling now but this was flawless and wonderful the entire way through.
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I always knew that the Lucifer pairing would probably not pull in droves of readers. And I kind of feel like it's a bit misleading up there in the header, and I half want to stick in some long explanation next to it how mostly that's not what it's about, really. When I first thought of the idea for this, it wasn't even supposed be Lucifer/Gabriel, but then I started actually writing and I was about two sentences in when I realised that that's what it is. Loki's children were something I felt like I couldn't just leave out, and I debated writing more about them, because as it stands now, I think if you don't have some idea about Norse mythology, you're going to be a bit lost (but I decided to assume that not many people who don't know at least something about Loki would be all that likely to read this anyway).
(Oh, I noticed you posted your bigbang. I'm looking forward to seeing how it turned out. As soon as I actually find enough time to sit down and read it, which seems to be a bit hard right now.)
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