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timelordshines

Too Soon

Dec 06, 2012 21:03

Title: Too Soon
Author: Timelordshines
Characters: Jack Harkness, Ianto Jones
Rating: NC-17
Words: 1330
Spoilers: S2E1
Disclaimer: Characters belong to RTD and the BBC - I’m just borrowing them.

Written for hc_bingo prompt "Whipping / Flogging"

Author's Note: As always, comments and criticism are welcome and would help me to improve.
Author's Note 2: Thanks to iantojjackh for ( Read more... )

nc-17, tw_fic, hc_bingo, ianto_jones, jack_harkness

Comments 8

iantojjackh December 6 2012, 21:37:59 UTC

Ha and you actually think I remember what that comment was.

Aww poor Jack. All he went through at the hands of the Master at least Ianto is understanding and Jacks not totally turned off to sex.

Great use of the prompt.

timelordshines December 7 2012, 21:55:51 UTC

Lol. You were just talking about how I should use a sex game with the boys and one of them using the safe word. It got me thinking.
But then I whimped out of actually writing dom/sub and ended it before it really started.

Ianto will always be there for Jack, and I'm sure given time they will get back to all their old games.

tardisjournal December 6 2012, 21:55:51 UTC

Awww, poor Jack. *Huggles* After what the Master put him though, it's a wonder he's still functioning normally in any capacity. The bells and whistles can wait.

I loved the playfulness between them in the beginning, and Ianto's attentiveness to Jack throughout. Together, I'm sure they'll come through this and be stronger than ever. <3<3

timelordshines December 7 2012, 22:02:30 UTC

Poor Jack indeed! He's been through so much I don't know how he carries on sometimes, but then he has no choice.

I'm pleased the playfulness and Ianto's attentiveness came across ok. I struggled to keep him in character wilst being both caring and dominating. But I whimped out of actually writing the dom/sub part.

tardisjournal December 8 2012, 01:29:34 UTC

It didn't seem like you wimped out, if that's any consolation. You had a great start to Dom!Ianto there--caring, but firm. If things had gone a little further, he could have easily slipped into being completely authoritative, which is just "more firm" (no pun intended).

And he immediately stopped the game when he realized Jack was in distress, which is the best Dom! quality off all. The rest will come with practice. :)

timelordshines December 9 2012, 20:28:08 UTC

Thank you.
Of course he stopped. He would never hurt Jack.
I guess I'll just have to write some more for practice then! Hehe

badly_knitted December 7 2012, 20:47:00 UTC

Poor Jack! The Master did more than just physical damage to Jack - he took away Jack's pleasure in the kinky games he and Ianto used to delight in. It's so sad, but Ianto will help him to get through the after effects of a year of torture, and one day the toy sin their toybox will be back in regular use again!

timelordshines December 7 2012, 22:07:06 UTC

*hugs poor Jack*
I'm sure Ianto will stick by him and help him work through all his fears and issues.
The toy box will be back in use before too long. And in the mean time, as Ianto said- vanilla with Jack is never bad!