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[hikari_cyhan]

Title: Yin Hands
Fandom: Avatar
Pairing(s)/Character(s): Zutara
Rating: T
Prompt: 7_chakras--Earth (Individual); Chasm, 5. still breathing
Word Count: 1354
A/N: This has been sitting on my HD for about...uh...a week and a half. It took me forever to come up with a title.

Comments

[xenoamorist]

Oh my god, I love you. I absolutely LOVE you. ♥ I read your Azula drabble a while ago; don't know if I commented on it... but I really like the way you blatantly describe gore and everything (makes me sound weird, huh, but it's true). There's not enough of this kind of realism in Avatar fics, I'm afraid :P

Anyway, even if you're not a doctor, the way you write it makes it sound so convincing XD Although I would think that, in cauterizing things, the heat would kill any bacteria? But hey--I'm no doctor either. ;)

Again, I can't express how much I love this. ♥ I really like how you bring the contrast that fire, too, can heal-and your descriptions are beautiful; you manage to paint so much with just a few well-selected words. Granted, you have some grammatical errors here and there (mainly with using adjectives as adverbs), but they weren't fatal errors XD

Adding this to my personal memories~ :D!

- hl

[hikari_cyhan]

Well, the Avatar universe does a really good job of having plenty of action without any real physical contact. And yeah, sure, Jet was plowed down by a 30 MPH rock, but the camera angle was clever enough that they didn't need to show the wound or blood.

Good point! I hadn't thought of that.

Oh, no! Could you point the errors out? I know there were some parts where I did things intentionally, but maybe my beta and I didn't catch some stuff?

[willow_41z]

Yes, the heat would kill the bacteria. I'm not sure if having her side melted together would save her, it might just cause massive trauma, but well-written all the same!

[hikari_cyhan]

Uh, whoops! xD

[batmarg]

I love you! This was very well written. And Zuko seemed well in character...well if he'd admit he liked Katara, lol.

[jade_sabre_301]

heehee, fire.

*realizes saying that will get weird looks. coughs*

Anyway...I liked this. I really do think he should have given her something to bite down on, though.

Your descriptions at the beginning were fantastic--sharp and oozy and just really very tactile. Very good. ^_^

and I loved the last line. :-)

[hikari_cyhan]

"Hey, Jade, would you happen to know what happens when you burn blood?"

"Uhhhh... These are really WEIRD questions."

xDDDD

I probably should have. I didn't even think of that! She could have bitten down on her shirt. =x Or a strip of fabric from Zuko's. Or something like that.

I HATE the last line. I'm trying to get out of the habit of using the prompt so directly in my stuff, but I couldn't think of any other way to end it so cleanly.

[jade_sabre_301]

see? she started it! *frees herself from blame*

something. Though you did a good job of describing the pink salvia and scaring me.

I know what you're talking about, but it works really well. And it is very, very clean. ^_^

[hikari_cyhan]

x_x Well, if it works....

[romanitas]

♥

Also, I still lol'd here:
"Yes to the--to closing the wound. No to staying here. Shut up," she said when she saw him open his mouth to argue.

But you can't see me from where I type this, for I'm still in hiding >_>

<3<3<#

[hikari_cyhan]

>_> Where are you?!

[romanitas]

>_> Northern Air Temple.
But am soon leaving.

[heavenlymaron]

As some one who has had a severe burn in their life, you have discribed the feeling of it pretty good. Very well written.

[hikari_cyhan]

._. Well, that's good. I've never been burned before. Where were you when I was IMing everyone I know, asking how to describe a burn?

[heavenlymaron]

Taking a guess I would say sleeping.
If you need any other questions about painful injuries I am a terrible clutz and has had plenty of bad injuries so I would be able to discribe them.

[hikari_cyhan]

Hahaha, thanks.