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tifaching

Time Passes

Apr 13, 2015 00:05

When it’s Ettie’s turn to choose, she always gets takeout. Before the bag even reaches her hand grease wends its way through the brown paper in artery clogging amber droplets. The aromas of Crab Rangoon, deep fried pork rinds and a pair of double cheeseburgers with an extra large order of fries combine to make her stomach churn. Needless to say ( Read more... )

michael, adam, experimental, john, death, lucifer, dean, sam, ocs

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milly_gal April 13 2015, 06:46:58 UTC

Oh my GIDDY AUNT!

Those last two lines!

Honey I have actual goosebumps!

tifaching April 14 2015, 01:37:52 UTC

Really? Jumps in circles. Yay! So glad you enjoyed the shivers, Milly!

milly_gal April 14 2015, 18:57:40 UTC

When has one of your stories not had a profound effect of some kind on me!? *eyeballs* lol.

amberdreams April 13 2015, 08:01:37 UTC

Oh very cool story. I can see how it would have given you trouble in the writing! Getting all this straight in your own head is one thing but conveying it to everyone else another...but I have to say, you did a great job! And as a real bonus - you rescued Adam and gave him (and Sam and Dean) a real family and a happy ending. I was trying to work out who Ettie was - I loved that you made her Eternity. Excellent fix it.

tifaching April 14 2015, 01:42:51 UTC

Oh, I'm so happy you liked it. It just seemed like such a convoluted piece and I just knew it would come out awful so I kept putting off actually writing it. Until the very last day when it was put up or default and I got every single idea I was thinking about to show up in words. So all's well that ends well, I guess. For Adam and for me. :) So stoked you liked Ettie, when the passes through time idea came to me I just knew I had to have the personification of time in the story.

amberdreams April 14 2015, 09:33:05 UTC

Your Ettie was far more interesting and sympathetic than SPN's Chronos!

freya922 April 13 2015, 11:34:37 UTC

That was just incredible. You had me riveted from the first word!

tifaching April 14 2015, 01:43:11 UTC

Thank you! I'm so happy you liked it!

sophiap April 13 2015, 12:14:22 UTC

Oh, WOW! This was very much worth the wait! I love how you subverted the idea of 'passes' to give Adam a peaceful, happy ending with a real family and not just the superficial father-son moments he got with John (and it's nice to see that there's a universe where Sam and Dean can have a peaceful, happy life as well).

Ettie is absolutely wonderful, as is her past implied history with Gabriel. I also adore how you write Death. He's utterly perfect, and I love the idea that Ettie is concerned about what would happen if there are crowds.

In case it wasn't clear, THANK YOU!!!!!!

tifaching April 14 2015, 01:51:32 UTC

LOL, I am sighing with relief right now. I was so afraid this would be awful that I kept trying to come up with different ideas to write. :) But this is the first one I had and every bit of it went through my mind about a billion times until finally I just wrote it down. I am sooooo glad that you think it was worth waiting for.

Adam was getting his happy ending in another dimension no matter what. That kid needs to be out of the cage. And that at least one version of Sam and Dean get to be happy has to be a good thing.

Oh, I loved Ettie too. As soon as I knew where I was going with "time passes" I wanted a personification of time and I wanted her to have a relationship with Death. Who I am so stoked you liked. He's such an amazing character.

Thank you!

madebyme_x April 13 2015, 14:59:40 UTC

What an awesome Fic and a fascinating premise! I loved how you kept us guessing for a while about who 'Ettie' is - the reveal was perfect.

I'm so happy to see Adam enjoy a well deserved happy ending (I hope they address this on Show at some point) as well as Sam and Dean.

The ending gave me shivers, and you knocked it out of the park with the last sentence. A wonderfully creative piece that fits perfectly with Show. Thank you for sharing :)

tifaching April 14 2015, 01:54:21 UTC

Thank you! When I got "time passes" to subvert I wanted a personification of time that would be nifty and have a good relationship with Death as well as past run ins with the angels.

Adam needs a happy ending. If Sam was that torn up after his time in the cage I can't imagine there's much of Adam left to save. :( Moving him backward through time to before he went into the cage was the best way I could think of to go with it.

And I'm so glad you liked the end. I was afraid it would be silly. :)