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Brigit's Flame -- "Strike"

Jul 26, 2009 08:37

Prompt: "strike"
Wordcount: 1,020
Warnings: ...masturbation, oh my; brief language
Author's Note: This was really tough to write. Interpret that statement as you like. (I'm probably going to look at this later and be like, "AAAAHH!!!")

( The first strike is the media's. )

[year] 2009, [rating] r, [original] brigit's flame, [length] 1k

Comments 16

eltea July 26 2009, 17:27:01 UTC

Ooh, this was awesome, and had me fascinated the whole way through - the way it kind of unfolds like a mystery, and you can’t even tell what the strikes are about at the beginning. Also, Sarah and Liz sound hot. *is amused that the HTML tag for crossed-out text is strike*

Don’t you dare look at this and go AHHHH, because it was wonderful - my default strategy with prompts is to do something clever with them and impress people on the strength of that, but you’ve done something more by stretching your own comfort zone, and I feel odd saying I respect you for that because duh, you already know I worship your writing and you. XD Anyway, though, I really hope this does well, because it deserves to. ♥

tierfal July 26 2009, 18:55:09 UTC

I would totally do Liz; I love her. I'm so glad you liiiiiked iiiit. x3 Also *dies laughing* XDDD

I try to do a lot of that, but for some reason, this was all I could think of for this prompt, so... I went with it. Painstakingly. omg, srsly, my brother was in the room when I was working on the second section. XDDD And baaaaaaaah, *attacks you* ♥!!

katden July 26 2009, 23:03:03 UTC

OUT & PROUD!! That was fuckin' fabulous!!!
Your language, the way you presented your characters, that -love thy self in a dark room-scene!!! I truly love this!
♥

tierfal July 27 2009, 19:20:27 UTC

Thank you! :D And that scene was a bit of a challenge to write, so I'm glad you appreciated it in particular! :)

emmadaiou28 July 26 2009, 23:40:37 UTC

My definition of smut has more to do with the language than the fandom-or-original issue. Using that ugly word that means cat makes it smut. Pretty words and avoidance of, uh, super-specifics makes it adult lit. Which is why bodice-rippers count as lit, I say. XP

Anyway. I thought it was lovely. I really like the format of the different "strikes," and your language is just perfect as always. I have no clue how BF's contests work, but you should win regardless. <3

(And from what I've heard, they love controversial topics anyway, yeah? You're a shoo-in!)

Oh, and boyfriend noticed this on my comp when I left the room and read it, probably because he saw "masturbation" in the warning. XD He liked it too, although his only real comment was a perverted giggle of approval.

tierfal July 27 2009, 19:23:15 UTC

My stuff really tends to be pretty ambiguous, because I hate the way all the direct-terminology words fit into a sentence. I'm such a dork. XD

Aww, thank you! 8D

And heterosexual controversy tends to help, but y'know. XD

HA, it's a pretty eye-catching word. XDD I'm glad he... enjoyed... it? XDD

bluebirds_sing July 27 2009, 07:20:55 UTC

This was clever! :-)
I think you’re totally right: to gain consciousness is often a matter of sudden realization, way more than a slow and continuous growth.
*Three strikes, and you’re out.* Well, Vanessa’s got everything sorted out now, so coming out is going to be her next step, I guess. :)
Thanks for sharing!
Tina

tierfal July 27 2009, 19:24:24 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you! :) And yeah, I definitely think revelations happen, but a lot of times, it's a process. :D

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tierfal July 27 2009, 19:25:24 UTC

Yayy!! :3

They definitely are, in my head. Oh, me. XD

*glomps you* 8D