DN -- Foul Deeds

[tierfal]

Title: Foul Deeds
Collection: Fifteen
Fandom: Death Note
Pairing: Matt/Mello
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 864
Prompt: Foul deeds will rise/Though all the earth o’erwhelm them, to men’s eyes. -Hamlet I-ii
Warnings: self-harm
Summary: No, light is necessary.
Author's Note: ...

Comments

[shiro_loli_pop]

...it is so. Fracking. Sad.

I shit you not, that's amazing. The beginning, and the end, and the middle, and all the parts between them. Comparing Matt to all of those things, wallpaper and cheap gas station chocolate particularly, were fantablouserrifical. And the end--the end, mon dieu, it makes me want to shoot something.

So sad...and the purposeful leaving the things out, the obvious hints that aren't obvious enough, they're so well-written and described.

And somehow the warehouse-sized easy mac box really set the mood. Don't know why or how. But it did.

[tierfal]

This one flowed for me in a way a lot of the others didn't. I'm glad it worked for you. :)

...food is important. Easy Mac is emblematic. XD

[tierfal]

♥

Thank you, hon. :)

(Haa... one of the Eddie Izzard lines that changed my life was him mentioning that showers have two settings, "fantastically hot -- and FUCKING FREEZING." XD)

[sabriel75]

Deliciously angry and the spite is palpable here. Matt's digression from faith to existing to imploringly defeatedly hopeful. Because as pained as he is, and as willing as he thinks he is to only observe; there's something stirring within him to fight.

Self-destructive, definitely. But the thought remains the same. Maybe I do mean something more, if only...

If Mello would just open the door. Or ask casually or no, "What's that?" Or look upon him with more than a far-away, glazed scheming glance.

Your choices of descriptions, underwhelmingly right, for the mood. Nuances that feed the wreckage of this relationship and two bright boys.

Well done.

[tierfal]

Ahhhhh, thank you. ♥