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Original -- Red and White

Jan 23, 2011 23:18

Title: Red and White
Rating: PG
Word Count: 960
Warnings: mild violence
Prompt: "swan song" at pulped_fictions
Summary: Vincent Duval dies in a Parisian gutter.
Author's Note: eltea made me do it.

( Just after ten at night on February second, 1778, Vincent realized he was going to die. )

[year] 2011, [length] 1k, [special] eltea made me do it, [genre] drama, [rating] pg, [character - original] vincent duval, [genre] general, [original] assorted

Comments 10

sabriel75 January 24 2011, 07:24:43 UTC

Ohhh... nice background story. These stories interest me the most sometimes, just because we don't usually get them in novels.

Great visceral details that highlight Vincent's slightly apathetic but most certain morose attitude.

tierfal January 25 2011, 03:44:46 UTC

Thank you! :D I actually think this one might end up in the novel, in a slightly more integrated format - I was fighting its urge to be present tense the whole time so that I can hopefully slip it in later. ^^

Thanks, bb! ♥

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hiza_chan January 24 2011, 07:29:50 UTC

You should just make that your authors note every time: eltea made me do it. Like a disclaimer.

I really liked the way this flowed- such a dark piece for you, but I really like it. And then backstory for Vincent is a bit epic. But I really liked this line: but all the same he’d never quite thought it would end. Presumably no one really did. ♥

tierfal January 25 2011, 03:46:22 UTC

We had a long discussion yesterday (okay, a continuation of a previous discussion) about how she is my shoulder devil. IT'S TRUE. XD

I am delighted that you did. :3 That said, there's going to be enough total crack in the future to make up for it, probs. ♥;;;;

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tierfal January 25 2011, 03:48:20 UTC

omg, I just fail at writing; eltea told me the same thing about him two weeks ago. XD

I'm glad you liked it, though, and thank you for reading it! :D

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tierfal January 28 2011, 03:03:02 UTC

That makes sense. :D And part of Vincent's problem is that he comes from a traumatizing RP, in which he was trying (and failing) to counterbalance a bunch of nineteen-year-old Mary Sues in every way possible. XD This is also why Edward Blevins the Werewolf Who Works as a Janitor is thirty. XD

richelle2972 January 24 2011, 18:28:09 UTC

Love, love, love,...

tierfal January 25 2011, 03:48:48 UTC

ANGSTBUCKETS ARE FUN ♥ :D

jobey_in_error January 28 2011, 15:03:10 UTC

HA there IS more. Great character establishing at the beginning, and you totally freaked me out with the fangs, and then WHITESPACE FOR A PURPOSE at the end. Very fun. :D

tierfal January 31 2011, 02:08:32 UTC

There is ALWAYS more, haha. XD I am not too ashamed to admit that when I see a writing prompt, the train of thought that follows is usually along the lines of "Hmm, does this fit better for Nick and Theo or for Vincent?" XD

I'm so glad you enjoyed! :D Thanks for reading! ^^