fic: Of Her Own Making [John/Teyla, PG-13]

[tielan]

TITLE: Of Her Own Making
SUMMARY: She's a woman all of her own making.
CATEGORY: Vignette, Romance
RATING: PG-13
CHARACTERS: John, Teyla, Elizabeth makes a brief cameo.
CHALLENGE: fanfic100 - #057 - Lunch
NOTES: This was to go in the zine 'Taking Flight: Tales Of The Pegasus Galaxy', but was deemed unnecessary in the end. So you're getting it early!

Comments

[ileliberte]

I really liked this, sort of slow and mellow and luxurious even with the accident and rescue.
Loved this paragraph Candlelight brings out the fine planes of her face, casts her in gold and bronze, like a goddess come to life. Pygmalion and Galatea - but no human hand sculpted out this form, she's all her own making.

[tielan]

I think I might be a little in love with Teyla as a character. Just a squidge. :)

But, yeah, I was going for a slow, easy mood with this one. Quiet and comfortable, but not without its moments of passion - I guess the way I see the John/Teyla relationship working itself out.

[imaginary_iby]

*content sigh* I really quite like this one. I like the progression and pacing of it. The changing kisses throughout the day is beautiful.

Nice lead in to The Ark as well, which is a great episode!

Beautiful description.

[tielan]

Actually, I think I tried to feed allisnow a plotbunny related to this.

Um. I think it was, "John steals kisses. Teyla likes it."

And then she went into a hypoglycaemic reaction. So, no go. :(

[raisintorte]

This was very enjoyable. I loved the flow of it - very smooth.

John leans across the low table, past the candles and the teapot with it's curl of scented steam and the china cups, and this time she meets him in the kiss, fierce and fiery above the hot flame and hot tea.

The ending was just perfect.

[tielan]

Thanks. I really wanted this one to flow, to show them in quiet moments without hard action.

Now I have to try for a hard action ficlet, just to balance it out. I feel like I've been doing too much mood, not enough wham!bam!kapow! lately.

[jeyla4ever]

AW,*long sigh*

Thank you!

[agriope23]

First line had me giggling like a schoolgirl. I like how John pursues her. Wherever she is, going about her day or almost dying, he seeks her out, almost without thinking about it, a need, maybe later a habit.

It's the kind of insight into daily life I'd hoped from Sunday. Not necessarily the shippiness, just the characters inhabiting and owning their space, coming to life. Kudos.